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Tchernobog


Complete AppleDash fanatic!

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A short trip to Canterlot with Rainbow Dash and Applejack is the perfect opportunity for Twilight to test out her new long-distance Teleportation spell. But a nasty cold dashes the hopes of a quick trip, and makes the spell disappear in smoke: instead of arriving in Canterlot, the three find themselves in the nearby Everfree Forest, and discover that their location is not the only thing that went wrong.

While Rainbow has exchanged her wings and tail for a straw blond tail, Applejack has acquired a rainbow tail as well as a pair of strong, blue wings.

While Twilight attempts to find a spell to return the body parts to their rightful owners, the others must attempt to deal with this situation... and with their changing feelings.

Chapters (16)
Comments ( 971 )

The rewrite is an improvement, looking forward to a next installment!

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Thank you! It was initially going to be chapter two but I combined it with chapter 1.. which ended up being enough of a word count for Equestria Daily. I just got word it passed through proofreaders, so it should be up there in a few days! :pinkiehappy:

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Congratulations! I've got a story myself that needs rewriting before it can be up on Equestria Daily... *looks glumly at it*

Eh, it needs a rewrite anyways.

Now this I like a lot its funny, and I can see this being an episode too! great work! I just wish this was a twilight and Dash shipping. please Keep it up!!!

:twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

FIRST! hehe I just came from the google.docs chat :raritywink:
I'll repeat my statement from there:
Great chapter. Pinkie lampshading the shipping names was pure gold :pinkiehappy:

This is a good idea :scootangel:

you if Twilight would have told Princess Celestia. what had happened I think she would want to help and not wait and have Twilight do it, I mean these are the elements were talking about.




:twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

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That's the thing. Physically, they're fine. The clinic visit doesn't show anything wrong, apart from stuff being on the wrong pony. If needed, they can still easily use the elements :)

Oh boy, this is good stuff.

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Agreed. If nothing else, it would be useful practice in case something like this happened in a more... severe case. Say, mix-ups of internal organs, or incompatible biologies. What if It had been Rainbow Dash and Spike instead of Applejack? Or Gilda? Or even a Diamond Dog?

If I was one of these girls, I'd want a full team of medical magicians, healers, and scientists on hand to study this stuff.

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

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I'd say that's been over-done. I've seen (admittedly not read) a few fics of the kind. This, I'd like to hope, is different enough to draw attention :derpytongue2:

28234 i think you really need to mix it up and take away the strength that :ajsleepy: had and give it to :rainbowhuh:

that way they are BOTH effected heavly by the incedent, also you kinda already alluded to it in this chapter
:trollestia:

MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAR

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Don't worry, chapter 3 is being worked on ;) I just want it to be right :pinkiehappy:
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Chapter 3 should have some of that, you'll see :scootangel::rainbowkiss:

a bath you say? :ajsmug: :rainbowwild:

Plz say its water proof! :twilightsmile:

Poooooooor Dashie... Oh colt... Nothing right can happen to poor Dashie, can it? Anyhoof... w00t! First comment! 8D (One thinks) Anyhoof, keep up the great work! Looking forward to chapter 4!

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

p.s. Thanks for taking your time with the actual shipping.

38986 *Sighs* Trevor is such a braggart... Sorry! Still looking forward to moar excellence in the next chapter though!

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Haha, I was slightly worried you might not really like this after that one commend on ED (though I can't argue with it. It is rather trollestia-ish... I just don't see Celestia jumping in and fixing everything. More of a mother figure 'guiding' twilight.)

As for shipping, it'll get there :) A personal issue I see with many, many ship fics is the pacing of the shipping itself, rather than the story pacing. Sometimes, it just feels entirely too fast/abrupt. I think something slower is a more accurate portrayal, and I hope I can express this right :)

can i have more.....? i will give you my internets

Trollestia strikes again

Has the magic to help Twilight's friends? lol nope make her do it just for the lulz

LOL Rainbow is right if some one dyed my Wings I would be angry too! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

you did a fantastic Twilight too, and the joke about letting her read and study was great, I can see her getting mad over it. Keep it up!

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Thanks :) It's definitely the most important thing for me. I've seen too many fics break characterization in varying degrees. I don't want that! :scootangel:

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Yes, yes indeed. :scootangel::pinkiehappy::moustache:

(i <3 your choice of icons. SO PERFECT.)

There are so many stylistic and grammatical errors in this fic. If you'd like, I could compile a list for you.

Ah! You have done a fine job mate. Even if they are a bunch of prancin' show ponies!! Gragh!
Get out of here you stupid sniper!
I apologize for that, he sneaks on my computer when I'm not looking. I actually come with a message from the herd.
The herd is pleased, you have our attention! You may live...for now. :pinkiecrazy: So long as you do not rush the shipping. :pinkiesmile:

And now, I sign off!
Godspeed you magnificent bastard-BlazingShadowBrony

started reading this on EQD but i like FimFiction much better and glad i found it on here. Love your Story. Keep it upp :D:pinkiehappy:

A bath? I can see where this is going...:pinkiehappy:

I'm not one to really enjoy ship fics, but this one has me interested. At the very least, it seems like you've nailed all the personalities.

Oh boy, I can just picture in my mind what will happen during that bath... although since I have a rather dirty mind, it will probably not be similar to what will really happen...

Great story so far, keep it up!!! :pinkiehappy:

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:scootangel:

I have my...plans for it ;)

Rainbow is giving AJ a bath? Bow-chicka-wow-wow :rainbowwild:

“Nice bath, huh?”

“......Shut up.”


LMAO that was great! and AJ got her first wing wood too, all and all very funny work.

“Nice bath, huh?”

“......Shut up.”

Lol, oh Big Mac, you tease. I love where this is going.

granny smith just laughed... she just laughed... wow... Awesome story bro!

Rofl at the ending loool
Keep up the awesome work

Very good read! MOAR!!!

Big Mac the troll?! Never saw that coming... XD EPIC

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

Been very much enjoying the pacing in this story - it doesn't jump straight into shipping, it slowly develops it.

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:twilightblush:
Glad you like it! It's definitely my biggest aim in this story, to do proper pacing. I see far too many fics just jumping straight in, and it breaks the entire flow :/

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I absolutely agree with the previous comment. This has some of the best pacing of any shipfic I've read. Can't wait for more, and this is coming from someone who isn't really an AppleDash fan (I'm usually more of a DashiePie fan:derpytongue2: )

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Indeed, my interest in a story usually immediatly drops significantly when in the first few paragraphs it basically says "pony A has secretly loved pony B for years blah blah blah". This pacing is much more interesting, its a shame that it seems so rare. Hell I'm not even sure I've seen this level of pacing in any other fic before.

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Same goes for me - PinkieDash/Rainbow Pie (whatever) is my favourite shipping. Unfortunately I rarely seem to be able to find stories for it, and then often struggle to find good ones when I do. AppleDash comes in second or third best for me though, but even if it didn't, this fic is good enough that I doubt it would matter :pinkiehappy:

Excellent job thus far with the pacing and humor. Much of my dislike for ship fics stems from the fact that many of them tend to fall into the "THEY ARE IN LOVE" trap. There's no real build-up or plausible explanation as to why the characters are romantically involved, they just... are.

Luckily you haven't fallen into that habit, and for that, you are to be commended. Good work. :twilightsmile:

If these sort of comments keep up, my ego will swell just like Dash in the mare-do-well episode! :rainbowwild:

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I think I've seen a couple fics with a similar pacing, but more often than not it shows the development as a description of past events/realization of past moments. They give a background, but they don't really show it AS IT'S HAPPENING. Which is what I've been attempting with this story. Funnily enough, the buildup is the easy part, as I have a rather clear image of it in my mind. I am still somewhat struggling with my idea of the tipping point.. :applejackconfused: and hope I can do it justice when I reach that point.

49168 please by all means point me towards more fics like yours
because this is highly preferable to the normal shipping i read. you are tredding on ground rarely tread upon.

Continue, please.

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