It's Hearts and Hooves Day and Applejack can't wait to spend some time with her special somepony Rarity, but unfortunately for Applejack it seems she wasn't the only one who had those plans for Hearts and Hooves Day.
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Dayum, that was some fucked shit right there.
9/11 confirmed.
Wut.
Dash is so out of character...
I have no words for this... It's that bad.
Wow Dashie. Yous a bitch.
Also Rainbow Dash wouldn't do such a thing or at least in a malicious and petty way. That's some bad characterization right there.
Your writing wasn't bad and the story coherent the only problem I can see is Dash was out of charechter but it seems some of commenters have a stick up theyer butts, when they where the ones to clicked on this story knowing what it would be about and then complain? That isent helpful criticism is just bitching that he messed with your idea of a ship, chill out,
So over all the story gets a 6.5/10 in my book.
7234773 Actually, the reason I was annoyed about this story was just how OOC Rainbow was. Should have clarified that, sorry.
7234796 thanks you
Well, I sense a sequel coming on, justifying Rarity's actions.
Yep... with how obsessed the internet seems to be with "cucks" now knew something like this was only a matter of time.
And of course it'd be these 3, the 3 involved in the most bitter ship war in the fandom
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I expected laughs. I was disappointed. Now I have a new mission.
Woah! What's up with Rainbow Dash? She's so out of character!
Well RD racist, out of character and Rarity seems perfectly fine with that. The story has no other point but to make Applejack sad and other than that goes nowhere and does nothing, we see very little of the consequences or anything that results from this. Its pretty much just "hey mudpony, screw you" and that's it, if there was anything else to talk about here I would have. If it had an ending I might be able to talk about that but it just kinda stops.
I'm not satisfied in the whole "Applejack is sad and betrayed angle" because it didn't have any time to develop, I'm not satisfied in the whole "Rarity and Rainbow adultery" angle either because it didn't have time to develop either. I'm not even satisfied with the whole "Applejack and Rarity's previous relationship" because that was barely established not even a single scene of them together in the entire story.
Normally I wouldn't be so harsh on a story but if you make a trollfic, particularly a low effort one like this I don't feel like I need to pull my punches. If it had something establishing farther Rarity and AJ's relationship like AJ spending time picking out something romantic for Rarity that would be something. If there was a scene afterwards where we found out why Rarity and Rainbow were doing this that would be something.
Edit: to those saying "its satire it doesn't need to be good or do anything" can you show me a point where it satirizes something?
Obvious bait for shipping losers. 2/10 m8. Try harder next time.
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What?
7235669 You don't understand satire do you mate?
7236656 I do, satire has to have effort put into it. Satire has to understand what made the original work in the first place so it can invert that. You can't just fart onto your keyboard and say "that's satire" that's the kind of thinking that got us to where we are today with satire with movies like Spaceballs and Airplane forgotten memories. If this was "satire" rather than just a trollfic then it needs to be held to even higher standards because of how harshly it fails at satirizing anything. And how hardcore it failed at making me laugh.
7234608 i agree
This triggered so many cucks. The story is written well, which makes it leagues above most of this site.
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You do have a point, there isn't enough depth to make this satire.
There's no way that Rainbow would do something like this, she is written terribly here. This fanfic is honesty just not that good to me, it only serves to make Applejack sad.
I sincerely regret reading this jumble of words haphazardly sewn together by a desperate writer. Few fics have managed to leave me with such a reaction.
I have no regrets reading this masterful piece of literature meticulously crafted by a legendary writer. Few fics have managed to leave me with such a reaction.
This fic confuses me. Why would you publish this? I understand that you for some reason might have wanted to write a short vent against Rarijack or something, but Rainbow Dash is horrifically out-of-character, there's utterly minimal characterization, and the fic seems to serve no purpose but to stomp on Applejack's heart. It makes no sense.
Ok this is epic
*roblox death sound*
This is probably funny for Sadists, or AppleJack haters. It's kinda weird tbh
