So this is a Rewrite of the whole thing?

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Indeed, this time around I actually have most of the story planned out instead of my previous “I’ll figure it out when I get there” approach.

I’ll keep many of the previous plot points, but I’ll change them around or push them further back as needed to deliver the story I have planned out.

Thank you for sticking around and sorry for the inconvenience!

I do like the more concise fight this time around, but I again worry about characterization. Sure, it's the tutorial analog, but in 8,000 words, all we've really gotten is how brave characters are and their general demeanor, without any hint of little quirks; remember that even something as simple as a weak stomach can differentiate a character more and provide little moments that make things more real to boot.

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I have attempted to differentiate the characters in subtle ways, such as the careful selection of dialogue tags whenever Zealous speaks . Barrage’s untrustworthiness is her main trait, the same way as Badge’s stuttering and ever-moving ears are hers. I will try to differentiate them further in the coming chapters.

As for chapter length, this is simply the way I like to write. Never been too fond of short chapters.

And finally I wanted to give a little disclaimer to the “tutorial analog” thing, while yes, this chapter is very evidently an adaptation of the DD tutorial, the rest of the fic will not follow the game’s lore too closely. I’ll draw ideas from it, for sure, but it will not be one to one.