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By Way of an Apology - Luna-tic Scientist



The things we create should stay in our heads. Sometimes they don't.

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By Way of an Apology

By Way of An Apology
by Luna-tic Scientist


=== By Way of an Apology ===


"The end," I say, hitting the period key with a flourish. I've actually finished writing a novel, the first one ever. The final scenes were surprisingly hard to write, and I shed more than a few tears over the last paragraphs, but it's all over, and I feel better for it. I'd grown very attached to my characters over the last hundred thousand or so words, and to do to them what I did... well, let's just say that it wasn't fair and it wasn't nice, but it did fit.

I'm free now, finally free.

"Save it, and we're done." I've been writing science fiction, off and on, for the best part of twenty years, but I've written more in the last year than in the previous nineteen. You can download it for free, but I can never have it published. That always was the downside of fanfiction; you can't sell what you don't own. The funny thing is, no one ever asks 'fanfiction of what?'

It's a hard science fiction take on 'My Little Pony'.

I do see the funny side--it's hard not to--so you can laugh, I'll wait. You see, I'm not alone; there are thousands of aspiring writers, just like me, all consumed with the same thing. The reason is simple: the world building and characters in this 'cartoon for little girls' are incredibly rich and full of potential. Since I discovered pony fanfic a couple of years ago, I've not read a real book--and this is from a guy who used to devour several books a week.

I'm not one of those people who craves human company, which is why I live alone. The house isn't large, and I keep it with a 'lived in' look--alright, it's a mess, but that's one of the advantages of having your own space. The room I'm sitting in is mostly in darkness, my house lights run off a twelve volt car battery charged by a solar array in the window of my spare bedroom; because of this power is always in short supply--especially now, in the middle of January. A single four Watt LED provides all the light l need to see the keyboard.

It's not because I'm poor, but because I'm a bit of an environmentalist at heart, and it was an interesting project. Same could be said for the wood stove currently heating the lounge--I have central heating, but I've always been a frustrated pyromaniac, and there's something very satisfying about having a years supply of fuel in your garden, ready for when Uncle Ivan turns off the gas to the EU.

So that has set the scene--a dimly lit room, hot from the radiant heat of the old iron stove, lit by an ultra modern LED spotlight mounted high on the wall above my writing chair.

That is why it is the glow I notice first. Blues, greens and pinks filling the room with a shifting radiance. I glance at the stove; sometimes a log would break up, causing the dull red light to flicker yellow and green--especially if I was burning one of the reclaimed pallets with their copper based preservatives.

The smell came next, over-riding the faint, but pervasive smell of wood smoke.

Delicate, like the scent of a meadow filled with flowers. It smelled of sunlight and summer, like long, warm days. I hesitate, finger outstretched towards the button that will save the final chapter, as all the hair on the back of my neck stands up. I slowly lift my head, certain that something was standing behind me.

Impossibly, She is.

An alabaster white horse with a single, needle tipped horn of some material that flows with subtle colour as she cocks her head to study me. Her wide, swan wings fold neatly along her flanks, the tips of their primary feathers extending back beyond her tail. The only things about her that are not white are her mane and tail--the source of the light I'd seen--and her eyes.

Enormous, violet eyes. Larger even than on an earthly horse, and like beautiful pools of water, soft and limpid. Expressive, so expressive, the kind of eyes that a film star would kill for. You could fall into those eyes, drown in them.

"Celestia," I breathe, almost afraid to speak lest this wonderful hallucination should disappear. She inclines her head gracefully; a slight smile on her lips, that wonderfully mobile mane curling and flowing around her neck like it is a living thing in its own right. It is the Day Princess herself, one half of the immortal goddess pair that rule the My Little Pony universe, the being who raises the sun each morning. Celestia the wise, Celestia the kind, here, in my house. I have a sudden irrational urge to apologise for the mess--that, or offer her a sugar cube.

That smile is replaced by a delicate frown. "ls that how you are going to finish it?" she asks, and for a moment her words didn't register, such is the beauty of that voice.

That voice was disappointed. Most children know that tone. It was the tone of a mother to a child who should have known better. More arresting than a shout, more painful than a slap. Part of me was transported three decades into the past, to when my mother had used a similar tone with me.

"W-What?"

"Your story."

Something in my head starts to scream. "It's a good ending, it works well with the rest of the narrative," I say hesitantly, then shake my head violently. "Why are we talking about that--look, how is it that you are you even here?"

She looks exasperated, as if this was something she'd been asked many times before. "Belief," she says shortly. "Enough belief and anything can become real. Not only that, but it can create a past as well, so it's true to say that I have always been here. Ponies have become popular on this world, so here I have always been." She says that last time bending phrase as if talking to a particularly slow child.

It wasn't a new idea; many authors had played with that before, that gods are a product of thinking minds, rather than the creators of them. Pratchett was the first one that sprang to mind; I'd always enjoyed his 'Small Gods,' but it was a recurrent theme in his work. The little part of me that was screaming suddenly fell silent, finally given something it could latch onto and work with. You see, I'm a scientist by trade, but science is a bit like art in that it's more of a way of life than a job. It's a way of viewing the world, and I can't just turn it off. My inner scientist started to run through the implications of Celestia's last statement.

"So... you're like the god of ponies?"

"A goddess, if you insist on calling me such. A 'weakly god-like entity' is a better description from your frame of reference. I know you've thought that of me in the past."

I wince; so she can read my mind as well. The phrase she's used is accurate, even if it does sound a little bit insulting. "...and you don't like my story and you want me to change it?"

"Yes, the ending has to go."

A small part of me--separate from the part working through the ramifications of this being's presence--wants to beg for forgiveness, to get to my knees and do anything to stop her from being so disappointed with me. The rest of me rebelled. This is my story, all mine, and I'm very proud of it. The idea of having to change it, to compromise those hundreds of hours of work--even at the request of Princess Celestia--was out of the question. Anyway, this was just a lucid dream, and where else would I have a chance to talk to a creature like this? Even if I was essentially just talking to myself.

"I won't. I like the end, it's not a very happy ending, I'll grant you--but it does fit very well. Anyway, there's a big tradition of 'downer' endings in British science fiction."

She sighs, searching my face with those big, liquid eyes. "That's... disappointing."

Her sadness hits me like a sledgehammer and nearly drops me to my knees. If I'd have had equine ears or a canine tail, both would have drooped at that point. "I'm sorry," I say, "this is my story, and I'll finish it how I want to. Why do you care about it?"

"You're not stupid. If I'm created by belief, then I can be changed by belief. What people think of me influences me. I like this me and I want to keep it."

That was the last datum that my inner scientist needed, and he started waving franticly for attention. There was that other kind of god, the one exemplified by Stross' post-human 'Eschaton'. That particular series had died at a cliff hanger after only two books--I'd never forgiven Charlie for that, he'd had some lame excuse about the logical end point being too apocalyptic--and the Eschaton was engaged in some kind of long range war against enemies in its own past, trying to stop its 'uncreation'.

"You are changing the stories, to change what people believe," I say, trying not to dissolve into hysterical giggles. Surely my subconscious could come up with a better reason than that. Perhaps it is time to go back to reading hard SF. "I should be flattered, but not that many people read my stuff."

"Don't think I don't know that. I have a list of the creative people who believe in me; I have been visiting all of them. The ones that depict me as a monster, or a pervert, or--" Here she stared hard at me. "--as weak."

That first comment stung. "I still don't buy it. I'm just dreaming you." I'm an atheist in the same vein as Dawkins; I don't believe in any god, let alone this one. That I'm having a conversation with something that calls itself such can only mean that I'm dreaming.

"Perhaps belief isn't the right word in your case," she says thoughtfully. "But you have been thinking about me everyday for almost the last two years. That level of--let's call it 'focus', shall we?--has the same effects." She smiles slightly, but it's obvious that the word she wants to use is 'obsession'. "I've also been told that you are in the habit of thanking my sister for her efforts in the sky, although she'd appreciate it if you could make it sound a little less like you are praising a dog."

Celestia seems to find this amusing, but I feel my cheeks flush. She's talking about Princess Luna, not the actual 'moon of earth, Luna', but the other half of this semi divine pair, the dusky blue winged unicorn who raises the moon and paints the sky each night in the My Little Pony world.

She is right, of course. That is something I started doing about a year ago. It felt a bit odd at first, but quickly became almost automatic, just like the quick, reflexive prayers I always imagined filled the lives of 'real' religious people. It just felt right. Perhaps I shouldn't be using the phrase 'good job, girl' when referring to a near goddess.

I recover from my embarrassment and look her straight in the eye. "I'm sorry, but soon I'll wake up and start writing a new story."

"Is that your last word on the matter?"

A flicker of uncertainty clouds my mind, and I remember something I heard on a podcast discussing the show. It's always stuck in my mind; the hosts were talking about the attitude of the 'normal' ponies to their Princess. 'She's good, but she's not safe'. That turn of phrase sounds odd, but it makes sense. You tread lightly around a being of such power, no matter how gentle they appear.

"Yes," I say, pushing the doubt aside and nodding firmly.

"In that case I'm sorry that you won't help." Again with that disappointed look. "Sister, he's all yours. Remember that he still needs to be able to write."

With that she turns her back on me, walking around the corner and into the tiny corridor leading to the front door. The last I see of Celestia is the tip of her luminescent tail, glowing and curling like a wisp of burning gas. There's no sound of the door, but her light disappears, leaving me alone in a room that is suddenly far darker than it should have been. I feel a terrible loneliness, like at the passing of a loved one.

Then the strangeness of her final words hit me. What does she mean, 'still able to write'?

Something else moves in the dark corner of the room, something large and equine stepping out of a shadow that should have been too small to contain it. There is the click-click of hooves on wood and another pony, this one a dark reflection of the first, walks towards me with the slow inevitability of an executioner. Where Celestia is white, this one is a black so complete that I can't easily see where she stops and the shadows began. There is a glimmer of violet from around her horn and light of the same colour blooms about my wrists, pulling my arms out from my sides with irresistible force.

It is like I've been embedded in concrete. "W-what happened to Luna?" I say, wanting to turn my head and direct the question to where the Day Princess has gone, but I'm unable to escape that terrible gaze. The black pony's pale blue-green, slit pupil eyes hold me like I'm a mouse being watched by a snake.

Princess Luna was who I'd been expecting--hoping for, really--Celestia's night side twin. Unlike the perfection of Celestia, her story is one of a fall into darkness, followed by redemption, making her one of the more interesting characters to write about. This is most definitely not Luna, this is the Nightmare, the end product of her fall. It is all of Luna's pain, all of her dreams of power and vengeance, made flesh.

The violet radiance spreads over my left hand, uncurling the fingers and flattening the palm so it faces the wood burning stove. Slowly, but surely, I am dragged towards the fire; nothing I do makes the slightest difference. The radiant heat alone is starting to make my flesh tingle; I grit my teeth and will myself to wake up, all while my inner scientist is helpfully telling me that the outside of the stove was at over two hundred and fifty Celsius. I turn my head away, but can't keep my eyes off the Nightmare's face--

Her mouth splits in a toothy smile, showing a jaw more suited to a leopard than a horse. "Different things work for different humans," she purrs in a voice that is rich and corrupt, like a mixture of blood and chocolate. "You get me." She studies me, watching for a reaction as the temperature rises still further.

--and I scream, the heat exploding up my arm to fill my whole body. My eyes snap open to a profound darkness, legs windmilling as I kick the covers off the bed. Gasping, drenched in sweat and feeling like I've got the worst fever ever, I roll over to sit on the edge of the bed, one hand reaching down to flick off the electric under blanket. At the temperature I keep the rest of the house, the thing is essential--but woe betide the sleeper who dozes off before turning the heat down... Heart thundering, I carefully feel my left hand, amazed that it's whole and not a scarred lump of cooked meat.

"Wow," I said, "never had one like that before." I don't often remember my dreams; I'm normally a sound sleeper, so months can go by where it's like I don't exist during the night.

Using the wall for support I go down stairs for a drink, trying to stem the dehydration headache that's starting to make itself felt. A few gulps and I feel better, but decide to take some painkillers just in case.

I see Her when I close the bathroom cabinet; blue-green cat's eyes staring out at me from the shadowed lounge, the hint of a horn and a long, winged body. Turning fast enough that my drink spills, I whirl around to face the darkness. Nothing, just the back of a chair and the status lights of my modem. Shaking my head, I go back upstairs to bed.

The dream has faded by the time my alarm goes off. It's still dark when I leave the house; the sky is littered with the brighter stars and capped by a gibbous moon. Long, stringy clouds are moving rapidly under the influence of a fierce, cold wind. Despite this, there is enough to see by and I don't bother to turn my torch on as I walk to work.

There's a field of horses adjacent to part of my route. As I walk down one of the rare lit sections of pavement I glance out over the dark field, last night's dream coming back full force. At the same moment the moonlight seems to brighten, showing me the large shapes of the dozen or so horses. Most are asleep, but one has its head up and is looking at me.

The wind gusts, making something move on the animal's back, like a blanket flapping in the breeze. I squint, trying to see more in the uncertain light; for a moment it almost looks like a pair of great, black wings. A shiver runs down my spine and, as if hypnotised, I click on the torch and direct it across the field. The creature is too far away, but its eyes pick up the light and reflect it back. They are big, far bigger than I've ever seen on a real horse.

I hurry on, almost running the last few hundred metres to the security checkpoint outside my workplace. Half way there I lose my nerve and shine the torch back into the field; what I see makes my stomach clench. The horse has gone. Nervously I flick the beam across the looming trees on the other side of the path; it lights the closest trunks with a stark glare, but multiplies and deepens the shadows. My mind runs wild, populating those dark spaces with half seen horrors.

===

As the days pass it grows worse. I catch glimpses of Her everywhere now; the shadows under bridges as I drive past, the shapes of stonework in the dark of the night. Every distorted reflection has some element of Her. She is watching me now, I can feel it. I don't bother to turn, because there will be nothing there--but if she is there, I'll know She's still not happy with my story.

I must be mad, to be seeing things like this. I hope I am, for if I am not the implications are terrible. Belief is strong, but how much stronger is knowing? How many others has Celestia visited, and what is she getting them to do? I fear for the future of my species, for a goddess of ponies will not care much for humanity.

I cannot stop Celestia, for I am weak, and I cannot stand to meet her sister again. I have delayed too long on these thoughts; the feeling of being watched is getting stronger.

I must write now, it's the only thing that keeps Her away.

===

I have seen the goddess,
she is here for me.
I have seen her spread her wings,
basking in the pale glory

-- M Pallante, Worship the Dark Sister

Author's Note:

These two paragraphs are only relevant if you came to Apology via the link at the bottom of chapter 19 of Wasp, everyone else should ignore them!

Chaos froze for an instant, confused. Its location didn’t match its last memories, in fact-- the Flaw folding in on itself, the briefest flash of fear at the onrushing maw of a Guardian --nothing seemed right. It watched the sudden activity of the substrate, the normally placid and ordered quantum foam abruptly boiling and shifting, the automata engaged in activities it had no precedent for. The memories started to fade, replaced by others that had occurred at the same time. It fumbled for them, filled with horror at the idea that something had manipulated it with the ease it manipulated the bipeds.

The conflicting memories vanished completely, taking with them the lingering sense of unreality, and Chaos realised that it had been stationary far too long and fell towards the world.
Now go to Chapter 20 of Days of Wasp and Spider

Comments ( 71 )

Humans, in my pony fic? The horror!

I like this. I like this a lot.

Very evocative writing, very powerful emotional scene building. Just amazing. I really appreciate the blend of truth and fiction; the blend of your reality (I'm assuming at least parts of this are based on your real life?) and a fantasy.

Keep this up; I can't believe it has taken me this long to follow you and read your work. Bravo.

(And, I may have closed this story a few paragraphs in to go and check that you hadn't suddenly tagged your other one as complete without me noticing, before coming back)

Oh, and don't despair of being published on account of being a fanfiction author; I like to throw out a Hugo nominated The Thing fanfic as an example. It's not MLP, but it's still a derivative story that got at least some recognition.

That was fascinating. I like.

That was creepy, even more because this is scientifical plausible :pinkiecrazy:

Pascal's Wager, Equestria edition
You can't prove to me that--under the complexity of general relativity or behind the confusion of quantum mechanics--there isn't a blue winged unicorn moving the moon, or that her day-time sister doesn't enable the proton-proton cycle that keeps the sun burning. Belief in them will cost you nothing, but may save us all from the Nightmare if it turns out that Luna is still the jealous type.

But what's the probability of such events occurring/existing? Well, nothing to lose by believing-- that's the beauty of Pascal's Wager...

Sadly, 2335099, the inherent flaw in Pascal's Wager is that there are other possibilities. Perhaps the life giving deity wants to be left alone and forgotten about? It is entirely possible that believing could doom us all, if one day the deity decides that she's had enough.

2335217
The solution: Stop believing in deities, so that humanity doesn't need to fear anything. :pinkiehappy:

2335217

Psh, unless they're bounded by some religious text that contains a deal/mutual agreement between the worshipers and the god(s) in question.

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Celestia doesn't have a book showing her benevolence, does she? Well, we're screwed...

2333741
Thank you; it was fun to write and made a nice break from Wasp. It's great to actually finish something!

Yes, big chunks of this are true to life (it's so close to an autobiography that it's not funny), with the exception of the whole 'tortured by ponies' thing (having said that, if you look at it a certain way...).

To be honest, I have never considered even trying to get anything published; this is all for fun (although I am writing 'Wasp' to be as stand alone as possible, so it wouldn't take much to file off the serial numbers, so to speak).

This particular fic was written as a kind of introduction for my non pony, non SF reading friends/family. Once they stop laughing, that is!

2333833
Thank-you, glad you did!
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Excellent, creepy was what I was aiming for!

Unfortunately, 2335333, at that point, you might incur the wrath of a deity that desires your attention.

If you know what your deity desires, then its not really a wager anymore, 2335392. At that point, it is just a simple fact.

Honestly, I would not want to have my personality subject to the whims of mortal authors. That, more than being haunted by ponies, seems like a terrifying thought. I am already haunted by the countless scores of people who live without rights, food, water and shelter, so adding one more soul that needs my help isn't going to be that much more of a bother. (by comparison)

2335633

I can agree with you on that last part. Realistically, I know that there will always be the unfortunate, whether their problems be self-wrought or just bad luck. However, that doesn't mean I can ignore the cry of the needy when people can do more. Unfortunately, I have to worry about myself first, and that entails getting a good education, going to a good college and getting a good job with good pay. And by the time I have all that, my life will have already run by, and I will find that I have done barely anything, if not nothing, to help those that need help.

Phew. Makes me glad I haven't touched on the princesses yet in my story, I don't have to worry about any... oh dear.

Seriously, though, fun little premise and well executed - engrossing, but off just enough to be disconcerting.

2336098

Entirely both too true and too depressing. While we can prioritize to a greater or lesser extent the plight of our fellows versus our own welfare, at this point we can only hope to chip away at the problem.

2341568

(opinion/crazy ideal below)

I'd like to say that when we obtain space travel, resources would be no problem and neither would housing. Realistically, that'd open a whole new set of doors for the greedy to take advantage (insanely high colonization costs for "pioneers," etc.) instead of using the near-infinite resources inside other solar systems (or even our own asteroid belt) to raise "poor" to "middle-class," by today's standards. However, if it did work the way I wanted it to, there would still be the very rich, etc, but resources would no longer be a problem, and that's a big step forward.

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I'm afraid I see large-scale space travel as more of an 'if' than a 'when', and only as a result of our solving our problems - not as a solution to them. Yeah, if we get there, it would open a lot of doors, but we have to get there first, and we're not out of the woods yet.

Our first priority should be to get ourselves back in balance with our biosphere, and not relying on unsustainable polluting resources. Otherwise, I'm afraid reaching for the stars will take too much time and resources, and we'll find everything falling apart while we're still only halfway there.

2344629

Humanity does progress and destruction best-- I know we'll make it to the stars eventually so long as we don't blow ourselves up xD.

2341542
Just make sure you write about Her with respect, or you'll be seeing Her everywhere.
Glad you liked it.

2345116

Well, I think us completely blowing ourselves up is an outside chance (but still worth taking safeguards about). I'm more worried about the wheels coming off thoroughly enough to cause a new dark ages, except this time we won't have the same resource base to climb back up with.

2347814

That's a good point. However, keep in mind that the US has quite a bit of oil in it ("although it costs a lot to treat currently," being the excuse, the government apparently owns most of the land it's on. No shocker there) and is has about 1.2 trillion barrels of oil in the N-W region (there was some WSJ article on it.) You also have to keep in mind that quite a few African countries have a large amount of natural resources, so there would still be a select few nations that would dominate politics for X many centuries if we ever did regress to such a state.

Nightmare Moon, when you take her out of the context of pastel magic horses and take her "seriously", is goddamn terrifying. Good job in conveying that to your readers!

I'm an atheist.
That said, I frequently find myself reminded of the deities and such of whatever fiction I'm invested in. I can't see the moon without thinking of Luna, and when I'm in bed, the phrase "Dear Princess Celestia" rolls through my head every few minutes. Clouds remind me of pegasi, fields of earth ponies, and stars of unicorns. The stories I've read, and the stories I'd like to write, play through my head when nothing else is going on.
It seems hypocritical to me, but cognitive dissonance hasn't set in. In some ways, I'm actually hoping for hallucinations such as these.

Well, anyway, lovely story. :heart:

Phew! Well done with the nightmare parts! Those are the worst dreams, aren't they? The ones where you can't get away.

And yeah, Nightmare Moon inhabiting dreams? It seems to me that sealing her in the moon made more sense when we found that out. Yikes.

So an author abandoned a series called "Eschaton" because it was getting "too apocalyptic"? Heh. I was first introduced to the term eschato--through eschatology, the theology of end things. Which so many people call "The Apocalypse". (Theology geek is theologically geeky.)

I have always loved the "good, not safe" line. But then, Lewis is very quotable.

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Thanks, glad I could give you a shiver! The Nightmare has always been my favorite.
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You can be spiritual and still be an atheist; it's kind of inevitable I think, the human mind appears to have these things built-in, probably some holdover from our evolutionary past. I'm the same way (the fic is pretty autobiographical). Thanks for the comment :twilightsmile:
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Thanks, glad you liked it. Yes, Luna being able to manipulate dreams would make the Nightmare even more terrifying -- nothing could stand against her for long if she used the ability widely.
I should have seen the Eschaton/apocalypse link! I feel like such a foal (fortunately the line works!).
I'd forgotten about that bit from 'Lion'; something else to add to my read again list.

Thank you, sir, for what (I hope) was an excellently crafted April Fool's joke. All craftsponyship was of the highest quality. I enjoyed what you posted today, and I can't wait to see the actual next chapter of Wasp.

2357881 Thank you! Glad it was appreciated -- the 'real' next chapter will be along as soon as I can prise it from the paws of my prereaders. Also nice to see that my cheap ploy of linking people through to this fic also worked!

Since I discovered pony fanfic a couple of years ago, I've not read a real book--and this is from a guy who used to devour several books a week.

Man, I am right with you on this point. Other than a few particular books, I've barely read anything "real" in a little more than a year. The funny thing in my mind is that despite the change, I'm reading more now than I ever have before. The near infinite amount of fanfiction on the Internet works really well for someone who reads like most people breathe.

Also, that was awesome and unexpected, both the alternate ending (is it alternate if it's the first one published?) of Wasp and this story here. Good show.

I must write now, it's the only thing that keeps Her away.
~Luna-tic Scientist

Sounds like something from Alan Wake.

And on the subject of royal safety, I'm suddenly reminded of a classic.

“Safe?” said Mr. Beaver; “don’t you hear what Mrs. Beaver tells you? Who said anything about safe? ‘Course he isn’t safe. But he’s good. He’s the King, I tell you.”
~C.S Lewis, The Lion, The Witch, and The Wardrobe

You know, I do so many of those things.

I greet the moon when I see it and imagine Luna hearing me somewhere. (I should get in the habit of doing that for Celestia.)
I can easily imagine ponies around me.
I haven't read a real book front to back since finding MLP fanfiction. (Robert Jordan's "Towers of Midnight" sits half-read on my shelf not 5 feet away.)

I hope Celestia appreciates the characterization I've thought up for her; it's a bit of a different take, but I'd like to think she'd appreciate it.



P.S. Speaking of weird things... If I ever get enough money, I would like to commission a life-sized version of the rearing Celestia statue. I think she'd appreciate the sillyness of a statue dedicated to her existence in a world where she doesn't (maybe). :derpytongue2:

At first, I admit I felt a hint of jealousy, even if I could claim royal visitation with as much authority as you have.
By the end, I was very, very glad that I didn't. I look forward to my dreams this night, and yet at the same time, I dread what may come of them.
Thanks a lot. :ajbemused:

Siccing Nightmare Moon on authors is not a constructive form of literary criticism, Celestia. Bad Princess, bad!

And you, caving to pretty Princess ponies. For shame. Where's your genetic human superiority complex?

2358700
Thank you! Yes, it's an alternate ending. Reading is the one regret I have about starting writing; I just don't have the time anymore, so I'm reduced to snatching pages here and there. Without my phone I'd be really screwed.
2360287
Heh, at the time I'm leaving home for work the sun is just rising, I've been greeting it ever since. The Celestia statue is a great idea -- full size would be best, but even a little one to put on a stand would be nice. Sounds like we need a Kickstarter!
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I wouldn't worry, just make sure you do as She asks...
2365259
I think that's the 'only' unrealistic thing about the story: the fact that I'd say 'no' to Celestia. I mean, really!
...and I stopped believing in humanity's genetic superiority a loooong time ago.

2367279
Poor form, sir! As a subject of HRH Queen Elisabeth, there is only one crown you should admit you would bow to, and it isn't on the head of some pony. If Celestia had a problem with something I wrote, I'd tell her to get in line with the others.

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You are, of course, absolutely correct. Having said that, knowing the incestuous nature of the European Royal Houses, I wouldn't be surprised to find that HRH Elizabeth II is related to Celestia in some way; perhaps via Catherine the Great? I'm sure she'd agree with Celestia, if the Princess asked.

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I can't particularly argue with your supposition of relationship between the Queen and Princess, vulgar though it may be, but HRH Elisabeth II doesn't go after ever author that portrays her ancestors unflatteringly and I doubt she would condone Celestia doing so, especially to one of her subjects. Freedom of Speech is protected, after all.

That is something I started doing about a year ago. It felt a bit odd at first, but quickly became almost automatic, just like the quick, reflexive prayers I always imagined filled the lives of 'real' religious people. It just felt right.

. . . I would have figured there must be others if I had ever bothered to consider the issue, but I never thought I'd actually have my illusion of being the only one shattered. I'm not sure how I feel about this. Happy I'm not alone? Sad I'm not unique? A little disturbed there is another rational person who can get so into the pattern of praying to pastel pony princesses as to start slightly believing? Annoyed that I will never be able to resist the urge to alliterate when talking about these sorts of things?
Yeah, probably that last one.

2368318 This is now truth. It has to be.

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Ah, if only I was in to writing historical fantasy romances!
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Belief in gods/spirits appears to be hard-coded into humanity at some fundamental level. It would be interesting to find out how many of us do these kinds of things, especially among those who have no 'real' religion.
I know that when I go, I'd much rather meet Celestia than anything else!

Uh..........wow.
I am a little confused, but that was pretty well written to be honest.

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Actually, I have it figured out now. Just one question.
Why is Luna Nightmare Moon? Is she believed that way so often?

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Luna can look like the Nightmare whenever she likes; in a way they are fighting for their own survival, so she picks the form most likely to work. Based on the amount of NMM art I see, I do think that thoughts of Luna pretty much come hand-in-hand with thoughts of the Nightmare.

There's a chunk of headcanon in there as well; prehistory Luna looked like the Nightmare, and as the thoughts of the person being visited matter, that's what happens. The author in the story (ie, me) also doesn't have an imagination that allows nice things to happen to him!

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Kind of bad cop, really bad cop!

Oh, if only stories could become true acts of creation. Our world could do with a good coherent plot line. It amuses me terribly that one such a creation would be able to influence her own creation. Fuck causality! I have ponies. :pinkiecrazy:

Those who refuse the Powers, nonetheless serve the Powers.
Those who serve the Powers, themselves become the Powers.

Beware the Choice! Beware refusing it!

I was going to ask if the retcon in DoWaS was a deliberate bait-and-switch, or a genuine change of mind...

...but now, well, never mind.

(As a non-ponyfic writer, I'm precious about my writing too, especially when it comes to NOT letting any fondness I have for my characters dissuade me from doing horrid things to them. However, if the normal Luna asked me to change something, I'd probably be too overcome by the cuteness to demur.)
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(Please stop crying... here, look, I'm writing that you found some chocklit hearts and lived in a candy castle forever, just stop crying!)

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It was an April fool, a year in the making, but I guess you figured that out.

Partly written to prove to myself that I could be brutal to characters in whose heads I'd spent hundreds of hours, and partly as a potential 'real end', should the worst happen and my muse gallop off for pastures new.

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It was an April fool, a year in the making, but I guess you figured that out.

Nope nope nope, too late, this story is now my headcanon for precisely how it all went down in every particular. :pinkiehappy:

Ha! Well done, sir. Lovecraftian ponies should totally be a thing now.

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