A young Discord enjoys the sunrise. It's very quiet here, which means there is plenty of time to think.
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I've only skimmed through the early sections of the story and them some, but I can tell that the sentence structure for some of the sentences seems a little awkward and stilted. Moreover, some parts could be a bit more fleshed out.
Unfortunately, I'm not operating at optimal capacity, so could you kindly wait before I post more constructive feedback later?
7388983 Sure, I can wait for more feedback.
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Are you a rocket engine of some kind?
Nice look into a young Discord in his early days and how some of his imaginative side here led to the the bedrock foundation of who he is in cannon.
Welp, I now wish to hug discord.
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My characters and stories are filled with joy or angst, both in varying spectrums. They definitely all need hugs.