Apple Bloom is a very cheery pony. She spends her days trying to grow up as fast as possible by getting her cutie mark double as fast! One day, she finds herself waking up as Granny Smith! With no way to know how or why, she must do her best to seize the day Cutie Mark Crusader style!
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Oh, look. Botts trying to sound smart
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I reported. Hopefully, it will be dealt with.
edit: for anyone wondering: Mystic was replying two, yes TWO robo-accounts commenting with Chat GPT on my fanfiction. I reported and, quite obviously, mods banned those accounts. Shout out to their active stance against AI-writing onsite.
Quite the wholesome story. A "Freaky Friday" style jaunt where we're given a taste of the the life of a lonely old mare through the eyes of a filly (that I'd like to personally call Apple Smith). While I'm a little sad we didn't get the opposite perspective, at least you elaborated on what went on at Granny Bloom's side via the results of her mischievous meddling and weathered wisdom.
My only (minor and very nitpicky) complaints are probably some of the formatting could be cleaned up a little bit, and certain lore bits would need to be rewritten (Scootaloo, for example, isn't an orphan like we all thought, but lives with her aunts while her parents are globe trotting survivalists in the ponified shape of Steve and Terri Irwin)
So, yeah, an all in all cute story.
Beautifully done
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Interesting swap story that didn't quite land right for me. I've got to say, I feel like the fic's strongest suit was its descriptions. A bit overly flowery in some places, but in the whole, it communicated the contrasting feelings of youth and old age very well. I also appreciated the story's sense of helplessness in the situation. To go into detail, just the way the elderly can be railroaded into situations is very well realized.
Beyond that though, the story just feels awkward to read. The pacing of actions and the feeling of the dialogue just doesn't sit exactly right with me. I think it would've benefited from another editing pass or two, and not because of the occasional typo like "Apple Bloo" in there.
Like an elderly person, the story just kind of totters along at times with not much to do. While it is accurate for the situation, the question of the other side of the swap distracts the reader so much to the point that it's hard to focus on what you're reading. It is slightly resolved by the end, but the story suffers immensely from "this situation could be resolved by a two characters having a conversation after the inciting incident" syndrome. If they did talk, the situation as it's written wouldn't play out, but it's such an obvious thing to do that the reader is constantly asking themselves "what about Granny Smith?" I found it really hard to focus with that sword having over the story.
Overall, I thought it was fine. Flawed, but worth my time.