This story is a sequel to If Only In My Dreams
Linked with Love, In All It Forms
After being given a second chance thanks to Pony Joe, Rose Aphid is trying to find a place to stay, so that his kindness will not have been wasted. But the snow storm is getting worse and she cannot see where she is going.
Luckily for Rose, there is another very special pony out in the storm as well. Will she be able to help Rose find a place to stay?
i like it and yay that going to be more chapters to this story this time
i love reading changeling stories! so, my good pony, i thank you.
3919665 What you said.
3931626 yeah
I just realized something. You need to give credit to the original story idea creator. You pretty much just made a sequel. You need to add a link to the creator's story and you need to say that this is a sequel. Here's the link: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/153282/1/if-only-in-my-dreams/if-only-in-my-dreams Put it in the description.
Rose dies:
-Everyone hates Rose
-Twilight Loves her anyway and goes Nightmare
Rose lives:
-Rose is thrown away and survives while everyone hates her
-Rose is accepted and everyone tolerates her
-Rose is accepted and those close tolerate her and those who don't are blocked by law
Bam.
3983490 in some ways you're close, in others you're completely off
you'll just have to wait, like everypony else
3983529 Oh no, I'm right. I deliberately kept it so vague that I technically covered anything even remotely possible. To not have one of those apply you would have to go so random you would get bitch slapped by Pinkie and down-voted to oblivion. I mean really, how do you have an ending where the character neither lives nor dies?
3983827 i didn't mean she neither lives nor dies, i meant you were on the right track
Twilight Loves her anyway
and
Rose is thrown away and survives
they were heading in the right direction, just not how most people will think.
like i said, you'll all be surprised by what happens, but you'll have to wait for when the next chapters come out to learn what happens.
I love it and yay Rose going to be adopt by Twilight Sparkle
yay another chapter release today and this story have currently 27 likes and 1 dislike nice and that ok
yes and (hand you a tissue) and ok
4009707 i hate to say it, but the tears aren't gonna stop here but for a whole other reason
4009740 ok and what is the whole other reason
4009755 now if i told you that, it wouldn't be a surprise, would it
4009777 yeah
antumbra.... That name sounds really familiar.. Like a tasty sauce or something
4010096 if you've read Love, In All It's Form, then it should sound familiar.
...ugh, I can't think of words. too tired. Here's some music that ran through my head there.
Rose and Twilight's theme at the end. Followed by Twilight in the wastes looking desperately for her daughter.
Rose when she realizes what just happened.
4010113 dammit, now i cant sleep. the feels are too strong.
....twitch
sighs
I'll make some coffee....I gotta get up in 4 hours anyway. Good chapter, anyway,
so rose is not dead but she is inside twilight now i love it and you forgot to change this story complete since it over now and in the future can you write a sequel for this story about twilight gives birth to her daughter rose and she growing up with her family and friends with the tag Slice of Life in it and if you do that will rose twilight daughter look like her mother or not
This story was good for the most pat but that ending really rubs me the wrong way. Twilight still has no solid reason to forgive Celestia let alone call her a friend, especially since Celestia while clearly sorry for hurting twilight has shown no clear remorse for murdering Rose in the first place. The irrational hate towards a well intentioned, friendly and so far unharmful creature has been left completely uncertified.
As for Rose, well what about her? Is she a pony now? Still somehow a changeling or half way in between perhaps? If she was still a changeling or a hybrid of some description and Celestia accepted her then that would go a long way to solving things but like it is it feels like a bit of a cop-out to me. I take it this is the case since you said she was a pegasus this is the case and the whole xenophobia thing has been glossed over, something that doesn't sit right with me at all.
I loved this story to begin with, I really did but now it just feels awkward to me. Sorry.
the baby should have been a changeling so twilight could rub it in celestia's dumb face.
with that said, this ending was weird, Celestia showed no remorse for murdering a child, didn't learn shit and got easily forgiven to boot.
I like this story but this ending was weird.
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I didn't think it was that off. Celestia was barrier from ponyville whilst twi was pregnant and the luna asking luna to be the goddessmother didn't even mention celestia.
Twilight was punishing celestia by making her feel Horrible for what she did and isolating her.
Then,after rose is born and twilight realizes what happened, she doesn't fully forgive celestia, telling her they can't be the same as they were during all the years they'd known each other, but because of her daughter not cut lily having been killed, twi will sghtlyforgive her and be willing to start over with celestia
4012098 are you going to reply to my comment and i am sorry that i reply to this comment
4012098 Giving Celestia a chance to start anew after she apologises and expresses sincere remorse for murdering an Twilight's child is something I could believe, if a bit of a stretch but forgiving her at the drop of a hat like that and making that kind of an offer so quickly? I'm sorry but I just don't buy it.
The only thing Celestia seems to feel rotten over right now is that her actions have alienated Twilight, there has been no hint of remorse for her actual actions, only the consequences. I realise that might not be you're intentions but it is the way it comes across, to me at least. In my opinion this ending needs a bit of fixing up.
4012454 sorry I haven't replied til now. I've been busy reading another twi foal Fic so I hadn't noticed a message appear in my Dropbox.
And no need to apologise, I just need to pay a little more attention to my Dropbox from now on
4012640 i forgive you and ok, nvm about replying to my other comment on for this chapter (lol i put a lot of and's when i do stuff on this website maybe i should stop doing that)
4010659 just to set the record straight, rose has already been born. she was in twi the whole time celestia was unable to enter Ponyville because of the barrier.
the barrier being gone was because rose had been born and twi knew, since rose was now full pony, celestia had no reason to try and take her away again
4012595 i thought about what you said, so i added a little more to make Celestia feel remorse. i hope you like this better.
4014936 ok
4015367 what do you think of my ponysona?
4016762 i think it
4015077 It certainly an improvement but I still fined the way you imply Rose no longer being a changeling is a good thing, or at least a positive result of her murder.
That's probably just because of my own views in life though. Just my opinion after all.
i love how you tied two stories together in one great story. namely love, in all its forms and if only in my dreams good job!
While I like the overall concept, this is not at all how I would except Celestia to act.
4175495 if you read love in all its forms, you'll see why i wrote celestia acting that way
You need to fix ehr. ;)
Should be: (or something similar)
Learnt would have been okay if the sentence would have been, " and she had learnt how to read."
You had too many commas and included "loved reading" twice in the same sentence. My personal rule for writing papers and such is to only include one comma per sentence. :)
Dat bomb shell.
Nice work!
4176253 thank you. it's nice not having somepony tell me the ending was a cop-out
@Autum Breeze No problem, you have to treat every story like it's own universe. Look at the ALIENS franchise, it's so full of holes, you'd think the xenomorphs would be more like the changelings.
I enjoyed it, although it tended to skip a few great scenes (such as Luna and Twilight's conversation) that could have contributed to the narrative more smoothly than a mere summarization. Aside from that and the occasional error the story was nice, although I didn't have the time to read the one it was based off of. Overall, it told a good story, but could be improved on.
And that ending...
could've swore that there was a romance tag on this... I need sleep
yikes
lies!
5 bits says mystery mare is Chrysalis
i would too