Warning before reading I recommend you have a good understanding of dark souls 1 and 2 lore. Other wise you won't understand much of this.
I am sir Alonne and I was just slain by a undead who bested me at sword play. I died a honorable death and now I am stuck in a world of technicolor ponies and I am public enemy number 1. Now I have to survive and prove myself as a friend!
Editor: roker12
Interesting development... I will defiantly worth a read.
5298163 Thank you brother!
I hope once the story Paths is complete you will read it as well... It is defiantly a interesting piece.
5298258 this is a fst you actually want t read this?! Wow just wow I'm blown away by how this inteerestss you....
5298323 I have you know I heard every story the family writes. It takes me time but they don't go over looked including yours.
Good, good... Continue this please, I am left at a loss for wanting more of this to read.
5298377 Oh i will I'm makeing chapter 2 as we speak!
Don't let flash steal your waifu honorable warrior alonne
well don't fuck with him unless you come back to lie when you die XD
5308211 Yup he is the definition of 'you fuck with me I'm gonna rip your ass hole so wide that a fucking semi can drive in there!'
5308214 So true XP
5308223 So you are liking the story so far young knight? Also I would like your opinion on this idea. Do you think I should make Sir Alonne as distant decedent of Artorias The Abyss Walker?
5308228 its great so far :P also i don't think he should be to distant, maybe a little at first though
Holy crap! Another story! Man are you productive! Ill have a read of this one!
That moral.....I agree wit it.
NEED MORE
5495420 dont you worry young knight more shall come soon...
YES
5495611 next chapter is out young knight
Should have had Sir Alonne say "Da fuq?!?!?!" or "Guess I took a wrong turn at Alberquqie/Death....".
made should be mare. this is also a little rushed with how fast he got away and such, but other than that its fine.
after moaning it should be a . thew should be the. after back it should have a . a in no should be an. he jaw should be her jaw unless this is R63. after others there should be a , after who are you there should be a , greats sword should lose the s. strait should be straight . after rebel there should be a , after ramie there should be a , cant be bothered farther.
5506123 look I'm not perfect. I'm also looking for a editor to help me. So if you wish to help out be my guest.
and now we see why no one refuses manus
HE WILL MAKE YOUR LIFE HELL!!!!!!!!!!!!
5530699 He is a samurai a man of honor taking up manus's offer would ruin what he stands for.
What? Drangleic didn't even exist when Alonne was alive. He served the Iron King as his greatest general and best friend. He died fighting the Iron King when he left due to the Iron King going mad with power. Raime also turned up way later. During the fall of Drangleic and when the child of dark arrived to find the Iron King dead and his lands in ruin.
5308228 Artorias had no children and wasn't even human. He was either a giant or one of the gods. Maybe a lesser god. Sir Alonne is from the East. He's Asian XD Artorias is essentially from the west as he's from Lordran
Manus is in the same situation as the Iron King so long ago. A poor being with little power but much ambition. But onto my real points. Manus is a personification of all points of humanity multiplied many times. As shown by his daughters. He isn't alive anymore, his daughters birthed with death. They're literally parts of him like fear, pride a and desire. My most important point is that Manus isn't Sauron. He's not an evil being that seeks to actively destroy all things he sees. The residents of Oolacile found his body, brought it to life and tortured him, ruined him and drove him insane. They deserved what they got. The only bad thing we've ever seen him do was to a people that were torturing him and trying to feed off his primeval humanity. I recommend watching Vaatievidya's latest episode of prepare to cry to grasp his other aspects that we couldn't see in the first game.
5548889 Well ya gonna be a critic? Alonne's move set is based off of Artorias and I never said he was a decedent dude. I said I was gonna think about it. also how does Vendric know of Alonne if he wasn't there? There is a small possibility that Alonne was from drangleic. Also none of this lore is completely correct so I can vision what I want
Pancakes were flipped!!!
5559225 Eeyup. Chrysalis crossed the line and payed for it dearly
5559748 not going to lie when she started to cry i felt kind of bad for her ):
5561217 Chrysalis?
5561872 Yeah
5562204 I know what I did to her was horrible but she provoked him
5562212 i know but when she started crying i'm just like ''Awwwwww D:''
5562221 and everyone somehow knew Sir Alonne would not show mercy.
5562243 so true
5562330 X3 you like what im doing with the story?
5563518 Yeah :D
5565128 I think im gonna put this on hiatus for about a week or so Ive hit writer's block
5565238 Ok, writers block is the worst thing XD
5565240 yeah I asked yall for ideas so If you guys give me some I'll continue asap
Get an editor or something. You're very good in terms of story, but your grammar and punctuation is atrocious.
5565247 if i think any thing up i'll tell you :D
5565536 Sadly I cant find one
5565536 and what bothers me is people like you come around picking on me for this and aren't willing to be a editor so I will ask you will you be my editor?
5566159 I've never been an editor before and I don't have a lot of time, but if you can give me the ability to edit, or maybe see the chapters before they're published (so that I can comment any mess ups I see), then sure. I'll do my best.
If anyone else sees this, can ya give me some tips?
5566174 im gonna send chapter 1 to you
5566159
Btw I didn't mean to pick on you, I was just trying to offer a tip. As I said before you write the storyline itself pretty well. I love any author who writes a dark souls fic.