[1st Person OC X Sour Sweet] White Foam didn't want to go to Crystal Prep, but he unfortunately is forced to by his parents. And wouldn't you know it, he ends up making an enemy on his first day with a girl named Sour Sweet, and is forced to interact with her at an almost daily bases. But could these forced interactions change their hatred into something else.
This is set in the Equestria Girls universe, and is set some time after friendship games.
Proof read and edited by lilinuyasha and Korencz11
This is indeed my first fan fic, so constructive criticism would by very much appreciated. Thanks.
Chapters (9)
I think that it's a pretty good story so far. Reminds me of my first day of 9th grade. Just slightly though.
I liked this chapter as well. Keep up the great work!
6640151 Thanks a lot, glad you're enjoying it!
You can only push a guy so far...
Are these some of the standards of American highschool level of swimming? Just a thought, since I dont really live there, and it seemed to be very hard set up to do
6766816 Somewhat, I had a coach that had me and two others swim the 500 meter freestyle in 8 minutes or less in order for us to get on the team since we missed the actual tryout. It really depends on the coach's standard and how full the roster of the team is, I really just assumed that if teams had a full enough roster, that they generally don't accept new swimmers easily unless said swimmer gave them a good enough reason to, hints why I had White Foam's tryout the way that I did.
Sweet and sour, you can only be a bitch for so long before the guy snaps.
Now I NEED to know what happens next! I don't want to bug you or anything, but do you have an idea about when the next chapter will be out? God, I just need to read more!!!
6776650 I kinda live a disorganized life, so I don't exactly have a set date in mind, but I do have an idea about what is involved in the next chapter so I'll have it out as soon as my friend and I are finished with it. I do appreciate your enthusiasm to keep reading this story and I'll make sure to get the next chapter out as soon as I can.
6776928 Alright, thanks! Once again, no pressure to finish it, I can wait :)
Meh, a bit akward writting, but I like the idea if you can pull it off.
6800652 I'll try my hardest to not disappoint, we'll just see how it all plays out. Although I do appreciate your honesty.
Pretty good story so far. Keep up the good work.
OH dear this is not gonna be good will White Foarm lets if your good confront Sour Sweet in the next chapter because I'll be sure to patch her up a little heheheheheheheh
Ok, this happened. I like it. Continue, and as usual, the shadows are watching.
7221291 Glad you liked it, I was honestly worried that I didn't do a good job with this chapter.
I was kinda hoping for a Sour moment and not a purly Sweet one. That was an emotional moment that I fought she was used to. I was expecting her to slip and yell or insult him. Just somthing I would have expected.
Ok. Cool! Things are changin! Lol
So far your story is good. If you want, you can add it to this group for Shadowbolts OC.
http://www.fimfiction.net/group/209467/shadowbolt-ocs
Lemon Zest has a good taste in music.
Um, I know some of these words...
(Regarding the lesson)
Imagine Sour Sweet is on the swimming team.
THIS IS TOO GOOD!!!!! I WANT MOOOORRRREEEEEE!!!!!!
. I.....if y..you want to.
7458053 Wow, thanks for the compliment, dude! I've got a good feeling about what the next chapter is going to involve, and I've actually thought about writing down on paper soon. I've just need to balance it with the other three stories that I have been/thinking about writing. Yes, I have that many story ideas flying through my brain right now.
'Cough cough' Go on
I think the fireplace needs some holy water if the movies that bad.
8063911 Not even the power of Christ can clean the stain that is that movie
8063914 Ha
lol nice chapter. Glad to see you're back.
But I must know, are those actual movies? XD
8066141 Yes, yes they are.
Nice job with the update, glad to see you're alive!
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This is pretty good. More is required
Pretty good ending.
Sour Sweet doesn't seem as screwy as she was in the movie. Relatively tame, actually.
Are we going to get the old Sour Sweet back? I miss the mood swings.