• Member Since 26th Apr, 2016
  • offline last seen 46 minutes ago

Foal Star


Peace for Ukraine!

T

Warning! The first chapter has some scenes of light child abuse. Do not read the first chapter if this is triggering.

This story is after the events of the episode "Crusaders of the Lost Mark."

After Diamond Tiara confronted her mother, she was mysteriously transformed into an alicorn. Despite her sudden transformation, confronting and "humiliating" her mother, Spoiled Rich punishes Diamond Tiara by sending her away to a Boarding School, Coldstone Acadamy, for young fillies and forces her to hide her wings. Diamond Tiara now has to survive this rather brutal academy, navigating dull, soul-crushing classes while dealing with fillies that acted like how she was before. Meanwhile, after noticing Diamond Tiara's disappearance, the Cutie Mark Crusaders do some investigating, learn what happened, and go on a mission to rescue their friend.

Cover Artist: Pridark

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 17 )

How much more darker and more serious will this story be when compared to canon?

I know children often listen to adults and parental figures above most anything, but this is a bizarre premise. Once anyone else figures out she's an alicorn, Spoiled wouldn't be able to influence Diamond again.

11857912
Not really serious more like series unfortunate events style of dark but it gets lighter as the story goes.

11857921
Yes, that's true; it's an empty threat that Spoiled is using against her daughter in a desperate attempt to remain in control. It sounds bizarre, but I've been through something similar to Diamond Tiara, so I am putting some of my experience into this story.

An interesting scenario, though the opening felt a little rushed and redundant, I look forward to more.
Good luck.

Will Silver Spoon ever appear in this story?

"I… I'm so sorry for everything." she then balled into her hooves and curled up, wishing she could disappear.

Wrong "bawled."

Spoiled stood up and snapped, "Now pack a suitcase you're leaving tonight," then, the mare walked out and slammed the door behind her. As Diamond rubbed her bruised cheek with tears welling up, she looked into her reflection. She was thrilled to see she became an alicorn, but now all she felt was shame and regret, not knowing why. After all these years, Diamond finally stood up to her mother, but in return, she was being sent away against her will, and she could do nothing. The filly cried out and slammed a hoof into the mirror, cracking it into several shards; she then looked at the shattered reflection, wondering who she was, why she was given this gift, and if she even deserved it.

And now you have boarding school and seven years of bad luck to look forward to. :ajbemused:

Also, Spoiled B***h is worst pony. If there's one kind of character i can't abide... that would be traffickers. But if there's a SECOND kind, that's abusive relatives.:twilightangry2:

11870634
Next chapter she and the CMC will enter the story

"Yes, Mrs. Porridge."

Maybe she is just mad that they wasted perfectly good oatmeal that stuff doesn't grow on trees

Diamond glared at Onyx, who smirked but did as she said, giving a cutesy. Then, as she sat down next to Snowdrop, she apologized, not fully trusting her, but at this point, she was the only pony in this school helping her.

curtsy

Snowdrop wanted to pursue it more but sighed, "Fine, I'll drop I, but…if you're going to keep my blank flank a secret, I'll keep your secrets as well."

it

"Thanks. I'll keep that in mind," Diamond whispered as she lay under the covers and slowly fell asleep. Feeling the wings beneath her stir, she wanted to break free. The little filly wanted to reveal them to Snowdrop, but she couldn't still hear her mother's threats.

could?:unsuresweetie:

This is a bit too strict and miserable for me. I was expecting some bullying, sure. But not from all the staff as well. Story gives me the feeling of what I call 'misery simulators'. I'll pass.

Spoiled Rich you fucking whore!!! Why send your daughter to this terrible place when YOU caused that bullcrap in the first place?! Diamond Tiara doesn't want to be your slave! This is child abuse! And when the Crusaders get her out I hope they tell Princess Celestia on you and have you locked up in jail!!!!:twilightangry2:

11880998
The CMC and Diamond Tiara are going to do more then that lol

The filly turned around and pointed towards her flank, "I believe my journey is to learn to be a leader, and the cutie mark crusaders kept me going down a darker path."

More like they kept her "from" going down that path.

Cherry then flew up, "My parents wanted me to go into ballet. I said Buck that! I wana to be a Wonderbolt!" she then took out her hooves and, in a nagging tone, said, "So, they sent me here, to teach me how to be a proper filly."

Diamond felt the wings beneath her uniform aching, wanting to be released. She wanted to ask if this filly could teach her how to fly, but she wanted to keep being an alicorn a secret. Then, an idea cropped into her head as she slowly came forward and asked, "Well, um…Cherry Bomb, if you can, there are a lot of Pegasi who want to learn to fly as well. Do you think you can give them practice?"

You could always.... do both. :ajsmug:

ESwan Lake
After running across the Crusaders in Manehattan, Rainbow finds out a little secret Scootaloo had been keeping from her.
314 · 7.6k words  ·  1,171  14 · 14k views

If a filly that isn't fond of the girly-girl stuff can perform lke that.... I mean, I'm just saying.

The pink-coated alicorn cried, "My mom, she…she told me if anypony found out, she'd react her revenge on me. I don't know what to do, so I hid them from everypony."

Enact. Not react. Two VERY different things.

Snowdrop paused and said, "I see, but why would she do that? That sounds so horrible?"

"Greetings. Spoiled Rich. The honour is yours."

Diamond flew over, snuggled under the covers against her friend, and said, "So this is okay?"

Doesn’t make sense when she said she can’t fly yet :twilightblush:


Liking it so far! I don’t see much stories with all girls school on this site so it’s really great so far. If I was there I would encourage Cherry to take Ballet since it’s perfect for athletes since becoming flexible and stronger from Ballet helps a ton in sports even for Wonderbolts.

Snowdrop is cool to see. A different take but a welcome one.

11903337
Thanks for the comment there is alot more coming in regards to these characters

Login or register to comment