Nothing Interesting is Around Here

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A slice of life-ish story, and no I really don't have a interesting title, neither the description.

Made for the Entry of Dialogue only contest (the announcement), and Dialogue only contest (the group) (recommend reading the announcement first)

This was made in Google Docs, it just give me the excuse to write short Twinpie (i thought it was Twipie) story.
Rated teen for mild sexual content.

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nukestar

nukestar #1 · 3 weeks ago · 1 · · First and Last Chapter ·

Are you going to add this to the contest group?

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Undead Whisperer 1 #2 · 3 weeks ago · · · First and Last Chapter ·

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Yes. (Edits: Also good luck on the contest)

Hyper Star

Hyper Star #3 · Last Friday · · · First and Last Chapter ·

“Do you mind if you can take care of the library? I kinda have to go to the Sugarcube Corner,”

Not "the" Sugarcube Corner, just "I have to go to Sugarcube Corner"

“Uh-huh, and you aren’t going there because you like the pink mare,”

Does he not know her? Spike’s referring to her as if she’s a stranger.

“Oh come on, I was just going to buy rubies filled cupcakes, uh, do they have those?”

"Ruby-filled", and can Twilight even eat those?

“And then I was like "Bonbon! Why did you do that?" and her response was like "Oh, You were here" , with piles of them around her, after that, she explained that they were changelings ordered from the queens to kidnap Twilight, and then one of the ponies transformed-”

What happened? The scene changed from what was presumably Golden Oaks to Sugarcube Corner so suddenly, you could have added an hr line or divider.

"I love you as well Twi, but when are you going to boink with me?”

"Uh, wait, WHAT?"

“I said, when are you going to give me six bits?”

That definitely did not mean "give me bits".

"But Twily~, You don't have to read a book to have a fun sleepover, although then again, when I first began my baking, I manage to make a black cupcake, which tastes like coal, without consulting any book, so in this case, maybe reading one doesn't hurt"

"Consult" isn’t a very Pinkie word.

“Because it reminds me of a certain pony, with a bookish personality, used to isolating herself from everypony else, living in a library with his dragon.. Uhh brother? Son?”

Last I checked this wasn’t a genderbender fic, so "*her* dragon brother/son/whatever."

And everything after this point I have absolutely no clue what’s happening. The title doesn’t lie; not because it’s Slice of Life but because I have no clue what was happening towards the end.

Adorable cover art though

"TwinPie" with an "n" is a name for this ship I haven’t heard.

Undead Whisperer 1

Undead Whisperer 1 #4 · Sunday · · · First and Last Chapter ·

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Thank you for taking the time to read, and write a critique about my work. I will keep this in mind.

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