Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo are trapped in a place where your fears and horrors come true, The Rainbow Factory. It is a place that comes as close to a Hell on Earth as anything. Now they must escape with a little help from an unexpected source. (My own Alternate ending to the Rainbow Factory. If you don't like, don't read! Cover art isn't mine. Rated teen for blood, cursing and ponies getting crushed into rainbows.)
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The ending seemed a little rushed. Like, we don't know what happened to the ponies.
Plus, Dr.Atmosphere was suddenly added in and strolled in- just for the sake of making him appear. No offense- you just need to make this seem natural. Scootaloo hardly talked. Neither did RD. Polish up this chapter- er, ending.
I really like it
I didn't enjoy it as I have never enjoyed ANY Grimdark (Except Cherilee's Garden), but this was certainly better than expected. Although I disliked this, I will show my kindness and support this. I'll give credit to the Glaze cameo. That was pretty cool.
I will now have nightmares. more please
2121008 This is only my second fanfic, cut me some slack! I've deleted the Dr. Atmosphere part since it isn't necessary.
2121051>>2121059 I'm glad you enjoyed it!
2121548 Thanks for giving it a shot! But I have to ask, what is a cameo?
2121868 I never meant to give anyone nightmares, but I'll keep going if it gives you more.
2126891 Background appereance. Like on The Simpsons, where sometimes people like Jay Leno appear. Those are cameos.
orry. I'm just fully stating my opinion, but this can grow into an amazing fanfic. I'm being harsh because that makes you strive to do better!
Even though there is a rainbow factory sequel already named awoken.....
But you named it that so I can't judge
FAVED BECAUSE YOU MADE RAINBOW INTO A GOOD GUY AGAIN AND YOU PUT GLAZE IN THERE!!!!!
throughout the story, i liked it alot, there was some mistakes here and there, but i know you can fix them.The ending seemed a bit rushed, what had happen to the other ponies that were still i line and everything?over all i still like it.
2135258 That's what I was going for!
2146473 I line? what does that mean?
2162960 And it went well
)
(sorry for the week long reply....stuff happens
2232841 I completely understand. I am only allowed to play video games Friday nights, weekends, and Holidays.
2233448 me too
(but at least its worth it
)
This plot here.......
I'm giving a 4/5 rate, not bad actually
LOVE IT! I
the Rainbow Factory, bit too scared to read the original, but I might soon, really tempted.
I LOVED THIS SOOO MUCH!!!
Hm. Very interesting so far, but I still like the original ending
Faved and liked
Hoping for some more in the future.
2780044 Thank you!
2785500 Your welcome!
Cool
PLEASE I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS
really like an update, i want everyone to make it ~.~ better not make it a tragedy or i sick pinkie on you