You now face godlike judgement. May it extend eternally.
Reeling from the loss of her brother, Twilight has slipped into depression so deep that even reading the most cheerful romance novel can't make her smile in the least bit. Her marefriend of four years, Fluttershy, has gotten more and more worried as the days passed. Perhaps she has a sweet surprise for our depressed unicorn.
This is my entry for the TwiShy Group August Dual Contest. This follows both possible prompts.
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I really need to choose better music.
Twilight's all sad and depressed, Carmen Overture comes on.
I really liked reading this. And the weird thing was that your story dealt with Twilight losing her brother, whilst mine dealt with Fluttershy losing her pet. What would've been really strange would've been if the surprise for my story would've been the same as yours.
Then I'd be freaked out.
Anyway, I wanted to comment on your story since you commented on mine. I think it was written really well, and I especially liked how you portrayed Twilight. The way you did her point of view was awesome, too.
I look forward to seeing more entries for the contest, and seeing who'll win. Best of luck!
SHININGGGGGGG!!!!!! Why did shining die any way?
Mm-hmm! I really enjoyed your writing style in this story, especially how you voiced Twilight. I liked how you used the concept of grayness and continued using it through most of the story. It would be Twilight who would realize something like that.
I don't usually read Twishy, so this was a nice change of pace. I'm probably going to check out most of your writing after this now.
And good luck in that contest you're in!
Shining... why did you die?!
) but both of them were written nicely, may the best writer wins! 
I normally don't read stories where a canon character dies, but this was an entry, like Dragon's (In her fic, Twilight was a princess, two things I don't like to read in one fic!
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Horn Cancer. Lethal within hours with virtually no warning signs. Tumor forms, accidentally drains all magic at once, dead unicorn.
At least, that's what I had in mind when I wrote it. I didn't want to go on a tangent with it, as the focus was the TwiShy.
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I recommend The Frozen North.
<3 DarqFox
3107357 You should have said that on the story, it would have made it stronger
3107357 thanks for that tid bit!
Yeah... I was kinda skeptical at reading this story due to the description...Then I thought, hey... it's DarqFox's story. Hahaha, and you ALWAYS bring the surprises
Although not too big on the death, the story was well formed and kept all the feeling throughout. I definitely liked how ya ended it, in the sky... Ont the cloud. Was well done and thought haha. Like others I was a little confused throughout the story as to how Shining died, but that's a minor inconvenience. Well done Darq! 
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It isn't meant to be important how Shiny died, just that he did.
<3 DarqFox
3115737yeah hahaha, thus why it's a minor inconvenience
Finally got around to reading this. Once again, I quite enjoyed your work good sir and I must say, it'll be tough to beat it...but not impossible
Now just gotta wait for my story to be approved...
Took me some time to get around to read this one, just for the reason that a cannon character died.
( don't know why)
But now i'am glad that i did read this one cuz it was relay good, and adorable ending always works on me
Anyways great job on this one 9.5/10.
Cool........enough said
Worst proposal timing ever.
So velvet and nightlight are dead too. Hm, as much as I hate it, it makes sense.