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ReedHoarse


"As a writer I make my own rules. If I wanna start a sentence with a full stop, I will." - Garth Marenghi

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Sunset think's it's deeply unfair that her human counterpart is better looking than her. On top of that, all her friends assume that she wants to date herself. They might be right about that.

Winner of Third Place in the Sunset x Sunset Competition

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Amazing story hope there is a sequl in the futre

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Agreed, this is the best "suncest" story I've ever seen! (and yes, I'm aware there's already a story with that name and similar plot)

This is exactly what human Sunset would be like.

This is the funniest fucking thing in the universe

It's amazing

"What kind of raging narcissist do you think I am?!"

"Uh, the same one we've known for years?"

Thank you all for the kind comments!

Sunset made a mental note to take Rainbow Dash with her when she drowned herself.

I'm wheezing, help :rainbowlaugh:

There was a new contact labelled ‘Hotter Me’.

The power. The energy. Love this for her.

Apart from it being hard at points to tell who's speaking, this was great. Sunset actually met a girl able to dom her: herself.

Sunset Shimmer's human counterpart is better looking than her.

Not a bad scenario for them to hook up. It's personally say it should be longer so really go into their process of acceptance that they have the hots for themselves, but I still like it just as it is.

“Dude, you actually get that mad at video games?”

“The audience likes it when I get mad! It gets the views, which pays the bills!”

"UNAVOIDABLE CHIN MOVE, UNAVOIDABLE CHIN MOVE!" That's all I could think of when reading that.

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Thank you so much for the feedback! I'll definitely take that into account in the future

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I thought it might be a little brief, the contest guidelines are under 5k, though I'll admit I spend a lot of time on the set up


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Funnily enough, I watched that for the first time a few weeks ago

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Oh, I didn't even know that. Impressive to actually set up any kind of depth to that pairing in that much space. Glad I didn't try for that contest, anything I did come up with would not come in that short. I have even more respect for this now and good luck in the contest.

This was absolutely ridiculous! I especially adore the recurring theme of "I mean, it's obvious you'd be into yourself!" and the payoff(s) from it.

The two of them arguing in Latin is peak Sciset interaction. Love it.

“Didn’t need to,” she waved a hand, “thumbprint scanner.”

Fun fact: Even identical twins don’t have identical fingerprints. But I can believe that parallel universe counterparts would.

All told, delightful stuff. This is the resolution to Equestria Girls Hasbro refused to give us.

I-I can’t with this story. It’s SOOOOO well done you’re definitely high on my competition list as of now.

(Thanks for submitting to the contest!)

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Hahahahahaha! That was good. Someone is going on a date and going to share in the angry gamer experience for sure.

“That’s not important! What’s important here is you think I’m weird for being into humans!”

Or not, in my case, humans are icky.
And when you get down to it, passionate hugging with humans is bestiality.

Sunset wordlessly strode away from the clothing store and into the shop next door, a home store where she knew her three sane friends were shopping. Sure enough, she found Fluttershy, Applejack, and Twilight Sparkle looking at house plants.

Are you certain that Twilight and Fluttershy are the sane ones?

i love the story, I’m hoping for more

How did that work? This world’s Twilight looked exactly like Princess Twilight, so why did this world’s Sunset get to be hotter than her?

life is so unfair (also this isn't even true! Sci-Twi wears glasses like a NERD)

“I didn’t cut a photo of you out, paste it onto another photo, then photocopy the result, if that’s what you’re asking.”

dang Rarity reading her to filth

Sunset’s face contorted somewhere between raging and cringing. Thankfully Sunset Shimmer had matured and learned to no longer shy away from her past, so she settled on rage.

ahaha love this slightly twisted personal growth. rereading this after No Filter is interesting

“No.”

She looked up at Rarity who was shaking her head.

“No?”

“No. Darling, it just doesn’t suit you, don’t even try.”

love that this is true despite them supposedly being the same person

“Those both happened magically, you’re not going to be able to get it looking that good without magic or hours of work.”

yeah the magic shortcuts to good hair really is difficult to relate to

Sunset thought she had a cool bad girl vibe, but she knew she wasn’t going to win any arguments with Rarity on this subject.

i mean she does have that vibe in the context of a children's TV show... not gonna hold up against the wider pool of competition

“As in, do I want to meet her?”

“Of course! And, you know,” her eyes fluttered.

Rarity’s eye flutter was one of the most powerful weapons in her arsenal. Sunset had no idea why she was deploying it here.

oh poor Sunset, she doesn't know what fic she's in!

“Hey, what’s this?” Rainbow spun the photo round, “Holy crap! Rarity did you cut out a picture of Suns-”

“Rarity already made that joke, and no,” Sunset’s said, “that’s actually this world’s version of me.”

“Well damn, I bet this is pretty exciting for you, huh?” Rainbow said, and elbowed Sunset in the ribs.

not even a millisecond to think about it, love this

“Eh,” Rainbow shrugged, “I’ve seen the other me. She’s cool, sure, but she basically looks like a stuffed toy. Not to mention an animal.”

So many words tried to escape Sunset’s mouth at once that they came out as a choking noise.

“I… You… but you think I should be into you gangly, smooth humans?”

ahahaha

“You did date Flash,” Rarity pointed out.

“For social capital!”

so true

Rainbow Dash’s brows knit together.

“Do you think our Twilight’s into ponies?”

“What is wrong with you?”

“No, think about it!”

“I don’t want to!”

love everything about this convo

Sunset wordlessly strode away from the clothing store and into the shop next door, a home store where she knew her three sane friends were shopping. Sure enough, she found Fluttershy, Applejack, and Twilight Sparkle looking at house plants.

huh, that is the sane half, isn't it?

“So am I! Why not Human Sunset?”

“Because you’re a human too, duh.”

“Okay, but I was originally a pony!”

“And were you hot as a pony?”

“Yes! Very!”

ah, these convos are so great

Rainbow looked at her doubtfully, “you know I’ve seen you as a pony, right?”

Sunset gave a deep growl that belied the fact that she’d ever belonged to a herbivorous species.

She said through gritted teeth, “Take my word for it.”

i mean yeah if you're not into ponies they're all gonna look the same to you. think Rainbow, think!

Twilight pulled back her arm, “Hey! What was that for?”

“Et tu, Crepusculum?”

love the Latinate word for "twilight"

Hot Sunset mouthed something and began striding towards her. Celestia, she even walked cooler than Sunset.

love that she has become "Hot Sunset" even in Sunset's internal narration

“Um. Oh.” She said weakly. It had somehow never occurred to her that with the modest fame she and her friends were garnering, her human self might end up seeing her. Hold on, did she say comedy gaming channel?

ahaha as if it couldn't get any worse

“I mean, I’m a horse from another universe. A pony. But I got better! I mean, turned human.”

Ah. At least the last thing she saw before she died of embarrassment would be Hot Sunset.

now that's the spirit!

“And you’re really into me.”

Sunset’s eyes widened as she realised what was happening. Had the Human Sunset somehow used her powers? Oh, she hated this world’s magic.

perfect way to find this out

“Magic. Right. That’s a thing now, apparently. Or always has been or whatever. I saw all the things you were trying to tell me, I think? Sorry, you’re a horse? How come you’re into humans?”

love that this logical line is just followed by every character

Did that make her a narcissist? No, Narcissus just saw his own reflection, that flowery asshole was never faced with such an utterly perfect version of himself.

so true nothing narcissistic about this at all

“Yeah, especially with the whole being attracted to each other thing.”

Sunset paused. Had she somehow misheard her? Surely that couldn’t be right?

“…each other?”

nice

“Hm, you’re definitely using the wrong moisturiser for our skin too,” Human Sunset continued. Her voice had gotten low and husky.

the kind of relationship dynamic that can only occur in selfcest. great stuff, pushing the bounds of literature

Human Sunset gave a predatory smile that stirred up some ancestral memory in Sunset’s pony brain that screamed at her to run.

really love this, really makes me think

“Hey, that’s my phone!”

“Sure is. Here,” she handed the phone back to Sunset, which was open on her contacts page. There was a new contact labelled ‘Hotter Me’.

gotta have this in a Sunset dating a cooler Sunset story

“When did you- how did you guess my passcode?”

“Didn’t need to,” she waved a hand, “thumbprint scanner.”

very nice

Still in a daze, her phone hanging limply in one hand, Sunset let herself be lead away. In the distance she spied her friends, watching them and grinning uncontrollably. They were going to be insufferable later.

worth it


rereading this after No Filter and Wax Earplugs, i see some common themes and techniques and they are a delight. thank you so much for this!

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