Rarity invites Applejack to a gala to celebrate the anniversary of her Canterlot Boutique. Applejack has never felt too comfortable in places like Canterlot. Will the two ponies have a successful night?
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That was a good story.
This was a lovely story. You had a good premise and good characterization. I will say that it felt much too fast-paced for the story it was trying to tell. You really needed to slow down and add more detail, especially regarding Applejack's reactions. If you had, I think this could have been a much better story.