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pjabrony


My name's PJ. I'm from New York. I write pony fics. I go to parties with bronies. I'm not good at self-introduction.

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Crystal Prep Shadowbolt Sour Sweet was there when everything went down during the Friendship Games, and even helped save people from falling through the rips into the strange world of Equestria. But now she's entering that world herself as part of an exchange program. She has a new form and some odd hosts that she has to get along with.

A Manehattan couple answered a letter in the post asking for assistance with people from the other world, hoping to help the community. But now they've got a moody teenager in their home who's not even used to her hooves and wings. They've got to show her the best time possible, since they're representing their entire world. They'll need all their friends to help.

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I have to admit, I've never thought about spreading news of the human world to Equestria at large. It raises the question of how ponies would react. If word of Twilight's override got out, would zoologists and wizards travel to Ponyville, eager to explore the exotic dimension on the other side of the portal? Very intriguing concept, this...

So is the story itself. This isn't going to be pleasant for anyone involved in the short run. Definitely looking forward to seeing where you'll go with this.

Does anyone else feel that the concept behind this story is just bursting with series potential?

Not a bad start, but your Sour Sweet doesn't talk or behave like like the canon one at all (bipolar).

I am looking forward to more of this story. I would also like a hint of comedy in the future but this story doesn't Need it. :pinkiehappy:

“Manehattan? Oh, because ponies have manes. What a clever bon mot!” Sour’s smile fell. “If your idea of clever is cheap puns.”

Sour, your school's rival is Canterlot High and one of your classmates is Suri Polomare. I don't think you don't get to complain about the horse puns.

In any case, nice to see Sour Sweet making some fonder connections. The road trip should be especially interesting.

This is still great; I'm really enjoying your portrayal of Sour, and seeing her learn more about Equestria.

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7912645 I don't think there is one. But I hadn't thought about it.

“So, what would you like to do now?”

:ajbemused::facehoof:
Albeit appropriately cringe-worthy. :ajsmug:

“My cart is a fairly large one, but we still can’t fit in everything, especially with five ponies, and Moon’s d—“

“Oh, for Luna’s sake!” Moon put a wing in front of Little’s mouth. “Let us have one or two surprises. If we can pull it off at all given how little space there is.”

*cheesy porn music starts playing*

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