I used to be an adult. Then everything went wrong. I don't know how, or why, but now I'm in the body of a five year old. That's not even the worst part. There's a murderer in my head and a psychopathic flower that travels with me. I don't know if I'll make it outta this situation alive, but you better believe I'm DETERMINED.
EDIT: also shout out to my main man rezas who helps me write all of my stories
Interesting...
MORE!
Wow. This was so good. I'll be tracking...
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Yay my first "MORE" comment
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You deserve it.
This going to be GOOD!
Needs some editing, but not a huge amount. (I'm offering, if you're interested. Preferably on Google Docs. Check the bookshelf on my profile for previous editing.)
As a big fan of Undertale, I am interested. Also, I'm not a huge fan of "already knowing what Displaced are", but I like completely omitting how it happened. There's too many seriously overused clichés there.
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Technically the most unoriginal cliche is complaining something is unoriginal. Because that's been going on since humanity began judging every piece of art created...
Cute
Oh this is going to be good. Awesome start author person, keep at it.
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MORE!! also here have a like *throws a like to your face at 40 mph*
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*gets knocked out and can't write anymore today by the like*
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I didn't say "unoriginal cliche", I said "overused cliché", "Unoriginal cliche" is redundant.
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Okay I can understand that but the character is a displaced writer who got displaced
This is interesting. I'm looking forward to seeing how this plays out.
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Still, complaining about cliches still validates that you're the one being the most unoriginal here by complaining about unoriginal ideas.
So from everyone's opinion so far would you say this is a good or a bad story? I'm only asking cuz I'm reading a lot of things right now and I don't want to jump to this metaphorical pool only to find out that it's filled with piranhas.
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Well I honestly don't care if anyone really likes it or not I'm doing it for the fun of writing which most authors forget about and try to Pander to the followers they have
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Good for you man it's nice to have some confidence!
I like it
More?
8356365 my sorry but my co-author is out for the night
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thanks but I'm sorry if it is a little short
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Your welcome and NP
Good job. It's very similar to Under-tale and I like it. Keep it up!
DETERMINATION...
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I agree
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Frisk! Stay DETERMINED!
P.S. Imma go check out this 'door amv' thing...
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This is the door AMV thing I was talking about
https://youtu.be/HwHdkCecmxE
Sgt Jackass? A bit over-enthusiastic with the discriptive names, aren't we?
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it was Rezas idea I laughed at it
I laughed when frisk said really
MOAR BEFORE I FORCE YOU BOTH TO LISTEN TO JUSTIN BIEBER'S ENTIRE SONG LIST!! MMMUUUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH
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You are evil and soulless
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indeed i am
Great start for the fic
:P
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"Knowing the author is still working on the story fills you with Determination"
Op has delivered
Being there in the first place would cause such a massive fluctuation in the timeline that you openly knowing what's gonna happen won't change much more. As long as you don't go around telling people important details or trying to change it.
But they can know that you know.
Penguins!
More soon please
YEAH! TAKE THAT CHEESELEGS!
The song works so well
You mean Flowey
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.....................interesting...................