Princess Twilight Sparkle has a crush on a guardpony named Flash Sentry but is nervous to tell him but with the support of her friends and family, she might be able to tell him. How will this story go expect to find out in this story but will Shining have anything to say about it?
This Story is a Flashlight fanfic, it will also include, StarlightxSunburst, SoarinxRainbow Dash, ApplejackxDouble Caramel, PinkiexCheese sandwich and Fluttershy and Rarity x OC and will also take place after MLP the Movie
This story was made by Branix or Xinbra on fanfiction who I'm co-authoring for on Fimfiction now.
This Image was not made by me from an artist named
GreenBrothersArt
Chapters (5)
The author of this fanfic was xinbra from Fanfiction
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Thanks Dude
This is a good ship!!!
No matter what anyone says!!!
p.s Good job
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He still has his account
Thank you but please send your thanks to branix aka Xinbra he was the original author. Also send him your condolences I was told he went through a mental and emotional tragedy.
Okay, I know this isn't actually your story, but it's not all that good, and I'm a HUGE FlashLight shipper. Look, I want to like this, and I'll admit that it's not a bad start, but parts of the story are missing necessary words, and the pacing is a little too quick. Also, whoever the writer was just exposition dumped where Flash's feelings for Twilight came from. That part needed further detailing, and because of that, it didn't quite convey the emotions that it needed to.
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could you put a little more simply?
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Godslittleprincess
well thank you for the feed my friend but you could at least tell me what I did good
Sees the Likes and Dislikes
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HEY what's that supposed to mean
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You made Flash and Twilight interact in such a way that the two of them having good chemistry was totally believable.
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Thank you but could tell me what a picture of train crash is supposed to mean?
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I think it the commentor was trying to tell you that the story is poorly written.
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OK that hurts I worked for THREE strieght days on this! How about graditude dude?!
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Why are you getting upset with me for? I didn't send you that picture.
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Sorry It not you I'm mad at it's Isseus I have a problem with
>>Isseus
Who do think you are Bub?! I worked hard on this! and doesn't help that your desrespecting the work of somelse who also happened to have a very negative emotional experience don't what it is because it non of your beeswax!
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Nice reference dude
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Okay, I'm not even sure what you said because, just like your fic, I have no idea what you're typing. You don't use coherent sentences or punctuation and you make slews of other fails with other grammar and spelling. These are all valid criticisms, but I'm pretty sure you don't even care about things like that.
Now, if you can't handle criticism, don't publish your works publicly, or don't allow ratings/comments.... but especially don't publish them with your attitude. I would have gladly given you constructive criticism on your story and how to improve as a writer. Instead, you are so unbelievably full of yourself that it revolts me. And to add the cherry on top you used the, "I had a negative experience so I'm above critique" trick which seems to be what every bad writer tags their stories with recently. And you also try to lie about this being someone else's story, but instead you get triggered about it and say how YOU spent three days working on it.
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Sorry but I find an image of train wreak 10 times more hurtful and offensive than words. Next time you want tell me something I'm doing wrong use actual words and not pictures!
Ca'pishe?!
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Maybe if you and I work together on this than it would be okay.
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Yup!
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Now what do we do Branix?
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I reuploaded it to fanfiction.net. Just the first chapter.
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Great but do you mind if I help co-author it with you our do you have some one else on the job?
When you can’t spell the words “straight”, “none”, or “wreck” correctly, you shouldn’t be writing!! And I see you took criticism well, what with the absolute comment morgue
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whoa dude!
take it easy!
what did I ever do to you?
Sorry about the mistakes I was typing so fast that forget to pay attention to the keys m'kay?
Well I can sure tell this was from Ff.net.