Starlight Glimmer has been a Programmer in The Equestria for her entire life, working with the vast computer cores that maintain and operate the ship.
As Celestia, one of those cores, takes an interest in her happiness, Starlight finds herself seeking unorthodox methods to analyze her own personality and needs.
This is an entry into the Science Fiction Contest III by Bicyclette.
Cover artwork is being used with permission of the artist, Marenlicious.
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Hey there, fellow contestant! Here's my review of your story:
Just to start off, a few minor nitpicks:
But okay, those are minor things. I think the core premise of the story is actually quite solid. It takes a version of our canonical Starlight Glimmer and places her in this reality where she's a bit of a forlorn incel with no motivation to seek actual happiness. It makes for an interesting potential dynamic between the two.
However, that gets set aside for the much more grandiose premise of Starlight and Starbright facing down Brightest Star as a power-crazed collector of cutie marks. As a consequence, we don't really get to see Starlight and Starbright compare their viewpoints and address what it is that really makes them happy, This makes Brightest Star's appearance jarring, and it doesn't sell us on how Starlight manages to outmaneuver him.
Still, even if the story falls a bit short of its ambition, I think it presents some really interesting ideas and I genuinely think it deserves more attention than it's received so far.
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Thank you so much!!!
My intention is to cover the original conflict in two contradictory sequels. One in which Starlight flees with Brightest's power to travel the multiverse, one where she gives it up and stays, trying to help reform Brightest.