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Draconian Soul


Proof that I'm not dead. I was just in a slumber, waiting for reason to rise again. I might have found that reason.

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Who would have thought a pony and a changeling could have children together. I certainly wouldn't have. This is Shining Armor, and I'm in a weird situation. Chrysalis has shown up to my home and dropped a kid off stating that it was our son.

What will Cadance think? How am I going to raise a changeling child? Why does Chrysalis keep coming into my life, and why am I finding it harder to keep her away? Hopefully answers can be found with as little problems as possible. Oh who the Tartarus am I kidding, my seed is a changeling! There's bound to be a problem along the way.

Story inspired by Bakki's excellent fanart.

Cover done by Droll3. Thanks Droll3, and go check his work out

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 517 )

This story needs some work with grammar and punctuation, but the premise is sound.

My suggestion: Join the Looking For Editors group and find yourself an editor.

I'll give a thumbs up regardless, this story shows promise.

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Thanks for the suggestion and also thanks for the likes.

Hey, I can be your editor if you want! :twilightsmile: Just message me! :pinkiehappy:

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Sweet! I'll keep that in mind :yay:

I walked over and peered inside to find out what was inside the bag was a baby changeling sleeping.

You need to fix this sentence.

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Done...and done :twilightsheepish: Thanks for the help :raritywink:

Instant fave! B.T.W this isn't the first story to use the art work bakki made, nor is it the first story about a shiningXchrysalis baby

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Yeah but sadly Bakki seems to be the only one who has a picture like this, which means I had to use this one. I'm trying to avoid looking like a clone and put my own spin on this since it has been spinning around in my head for quite some time.

Seems like a really cool story, I'll read it!

I know you probably had someone point this out.....
whole? You're looking for hole. Hole in the ground, legs covered in holes.... ect.

Good first chapter. Color me interested.

“YOOOOOOOOOWW!”

Bloodcurdling screams of pain came from below as well as the sound of sizzling flesh. I could practically guess what happened.

I bet when Hobbles: the two legged palace janitor got up this morning, he probably wasn't expecting a face full of acid as he was dusting the castle ceiling fans. Now, Shining Armor has to deal with workmen's compensation and Hobbles has to explain to his family why he's missing his both left eye and ear as well as why the entire left side of his face is burnt.

Nice chapter.

I noticed a fair amount of fics based off that one fan art.

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I know! It's as if this fanart just screams "write me":raritywink:

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same here, dude. I got one planned as well...

So far there are 4 other fan fics based off that image. All are comedies and three are ship fics.

This story is gooood can anypony tell me the other stories with this fanart please

I'll do anything you want :twilightsheepish:

Comment posted by Rosie and the Doctor deleted Apr 29th, 2013

I've seen that cover art so many times, I even commented on one of the stories that used it saying "I swear I've seen this before..."

This must be a very popular picture.

:rainbowlaugh: love the ending more please

This is acceptable. Continue.

I think you got the whole "acid spit" concept from CSIMadmax's ongoing comic series?

I can't get enough of these stories where Shining impregnated Chrysalis. It's so believable that it could be canon.:eeyup:

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You never know! Season 4 might have Shining Armor trying to get a restraining order on Chrysalis for constantly trying to get him to raise her child :rainbowlaugh:

Question: will Shining Armor get thrown from a balcony? I feel this is a relevant and important question.

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Only time will tell. However something will happen with a balcony soon :raritywink:

2502248 If Celestia banish someone to the moon,luna banishes someone to the sun(oh horse apples)Twilight probably banish someone to the stars(or library or any place which are full of books)then where will Cadance banish someone?
A.To Paris(In the city of love you know?)
B.To the crystal spikes(not the dragon)
C.Rock Quarry(you know Pies mine rocks for diamonds and crystals right?)
D.- insert any Crystal/Love suggestions(that includes _e_)-

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The kinky dungeon cell for all her BDSM needs:trollestia: this is the only answer.

“Great, now I’m going to have to explain why there’s a whole in the floor,” I moaned.

There is a hole in the whole floor. Shining should watch his step.

I like the idea. Every Shining Armor unplanned parenthood story like this brings something new to the table, and I enjoy reading them.
But I'm left wondering if you have a personal vendetta against commas, as you're missing quite a few of them throughout the whole chapter.

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HAHAHHAHAHAHAHAAAA:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:
We will always meet again!

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It wasn't on purpose ether... I seem to keep finding you everywhere :derpytongue2:

HAHAHHAHA

I pop up everywhere!!!!

:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

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I'll always find you... Or is it the other way around?:facehoof:

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Looks like someones having fun :rainbowlaugh:

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My shades have been reporting "things" about you :pinkiecrazy:

hehehehehahahahhahahahhHAHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHHAHHAHAHAHAAAAAAHAHHAHAAHAAHAHAHAHHahahhaahahheheheeheeee.... I will always be here...

Very nice! :twilightsmile:

This story looks good so far. I can't wait to see Cadance's reaction.

DAMN IT! YOU BEAT ME TO THE STORY! -.- I WAS GOING TO WRITE ONE INSPIRED BY THAT FANART!!!! But I'll still read it out of curiosity.

“Great, now I’m going to have to explain why there’s a hole in the floor,” I moaned.
“YOOOOOOOOOWW!”
Bloodcurdling screams of pain came from below as well as the sound of sizzling flesh. I could practically guess what happened.
“Looks I’m going to have to explain that too.”

Cadence: :twilightangry2: OKAY honey, you want to explain to me WHY MY NECK AND MANE ARE.....well the way they are?!
:twilightoops: And what is.....this foal.....doing here in the bedroom.....looking like a changling?

I love this idea, just needs some editing on stuff. Overall,bayou definitely have my favorite :raritywink:
But I can really imagine Cadence could do something of a balcony-ish sort.
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Copy & Paste error?
"and all it took was sleeping with a changeling for that to happen. and all it took was me sleeping with a changeling for that to happen."

Interesting. The execution isn't wonderful, but the idea is new enough that I'll continue reading.

A sentence fragment escaped the proofreaders:
Well, until we actually had our own kids; and all it took was sleeping with a changeling for that to happen. and all it took was me sleeping with a changeling for that to happen.

And when you're writing dialogue that ends in a period, replace the period with a comma if the sentence continues on after the closing quotation marks. So, this:
“I Love you, my Shining Armor.” She whispered.
Should be this:
“I Love you, my Shining Armor,” she whispered.
I've written a complete guide to punctuating dialogue that you might find helpful: The Egghead's Guide to Punctuating Dialogue. I'll be watching you. :trixieshiftright:

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Oh horseapples dem errors :rainbowlaugh:
I'll change them immediately, but glad you all like it anyways :scootangel:

DAMN IT! you beat me to witting this XD

5th!!! HAHHAHAHHAAH :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:


You can't stop me!! CLONE!!!:trixieshiftleft::twilightangry2:

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Join the long line of people :ajsmug:

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Excuse me for a moment, I got some pants that need changing :fluttershyouch:

Why would we not read it

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