Everything was so confusing when I woke up in that forest all alone.
I don’t remember who I used to be, where I come from, or even my real name. I don’t know what happened to me, but I guess I’m gonna have to work with what I’ve got in order to live my life.
But hey, at least I’ve got my friends to help me start anew.
My name is Neon, and this is my life as a bat pony.
Cover art by ZettaiDullahan.
Interesting, normally I find HiE with amnesia kind of boring, they tend to come off as the writer not having come up with a clear personality or a proper backstory for the protagonist, but I am willing to give it a chance. Keep it up.
Why did you make this a comedy?
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im going to start adding comedic elements soon
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nvm, i took off the comedy tag and replaced it with adventure
He does have a point, the guy eating out of the trash in an alley probably doesn't have much of value on them.
So, we see the general opinion toward bat-ponies, let's see how this plays out.
Is the sister of Miss Cheerilee?
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Maybe she is, maybe she isn't. I can neither confirm nor deny.
So Bat-ponies are a 4th tribe that left Equestria after NMM in this one?
Or she could take him to the police station to have him file a missing pony report?
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I’ll get to that at some point in the story
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I…honestly didn’t think about that
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fixed.
Also nice start.
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His co-workers seem like an interesting bunch. The winged pony giving the I can't fly explanation is usually fun, so I'm looking forward to that.
I'm trying to remember where I found this story on the site. I primarily read HiE stories, and Neon's odd mix of knowledge seems to imply that (He knows about cities, hospitals, police and other such institutions, but doesn't know basic but related things like what country he's in, what the local currency is called. Heck, in the early chapters he seems kind of fuzzy on what ponies are. Also, he doesn't use his wings. Even if you say he forgot the mechanics of flight from his amnesia, the muscle memory should still be there. If he was born a bat-pony and was in an accident, he still should be able to move and use his wings just as much as a pegasus.)
Anyway, My point is I noticed the story isn't tagged for that, so I don't know if it's intentional or not. If it is it's very well written, good job.
Is the song supposed to give a theme to the story? If so I would put the song at the beginning.
Why did you put this in a story and not a blog post?
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I don’t know :l