Ancient pony legends say that the Royal Sisters came from the west. Until now, the long and dangerous voyage stopped anypony from attempting to validate those claims. But when Luna’s banishment puts an end to the rebellion, a group of her most devoted subjects sets out to help their Princess in any way they can, even if it means traveling to places where no bat has traveled before and where the harmonious laws of reality are suggestions at best.
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Shaping up very nicely.
Bit of a Middle Earth influence dashed with Cthulu perhaps?
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Thanks! Good catch, Tolkien and Lovecraft are probably the two most influential authors for me and that influence is bound to be noticeable in the majority of my stories.
That said, "From the West..." was primarily inspired by the Sunless Sea. It's not a crossover, mind you, but some of the general themes in this fic can be traced back to that game's extensive (300k words) story.
... well, this should be interesting. Though a proper banshee was less ghost and more a spirit that warned of impending death.
And yes, sailors as a whole are superstitious. Comes with living and working in the least-understood area of Earth.
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Then what does that make astronauts?
Why not just ask them?
... Banshee going to find that its not wise to pick a fight with whoever a cosmic power finds interesting. Plus somepony had a rather exaggerated sense of self in life. If anything by killing Sea Worthy she removed the biggest obstacle to Vigil's survival. Now they can take the right course.
That was a good story.
Good world building, great characters.
Damn good story. Well done!
Damn, strong opening.
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Well, that's an interesting beginning. I like the premise, and while so far protagonist-kun hasn't hooked me, Midnight certainly has. I've liked her ever since she appeared, and this chapter only made me love her more. I'm just weak for edgelords.
I like how polished it is,
though there are still a few sentences I'd consider superfluous or redundant. Also, interesting how this chapter is essentially just exposition, but because of the mystery and characters, it doesn't feel like it.The only thing I'm not sold on is the odd application of tenses. Specifically, the decision to use present perfect in a past story is a bit confusing. I'm assuming it's intentional, but I still don't like it.
That said, the usage of the future tense in the past chapter was very cool. And I'm a sucker for the use of "universally true"-present in past stories.
Also, based user of "sarosian".