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"To the everlasting glory of those few mares blessed and sanctified in the curses and execrations of those many whose praise is eternal damnation." I'll typeset your story in ConTeXt if you ask.

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Spitfire gets caught in a storm on her return from a vacation. Rarity helps in the aftermath.

Assembled from the slush pile of my writer’s notebook (a.k.a. related Q&S contest entries rearranged like a metamorphic rock) for the 2024 Wonderbolts contest.

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After partying, it was time to plunge in the frigid creek, shake it off, and sleep. If the weather stayed day—they did appreciate a pegasus who could report on distant clouds—, one or two would stand watch while the rest of the herd, Spitfire included, slept (and ate) in the fresh spring grass.

I believe you want 'dry'.

The sun was in its mid-morning position. All around here were clear skies. The storm had vanished in the night. It must have been one of thosevmagically enhanced storms for it to have intensified and dissipated so fast.

I believe you will want to replace the "v" with a space.

All Katherine’s hard work became undone as the precipitation punched holes in her feathers’ alignment coverage.

...Who the heck is Katherine?

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I’m less mystified about how that one wasn’t highlighted by angry red squiggles than by how it got in in the first place. That’s a distinctly phoneposter typo, but this was written entirely on my Mac.

The inset for the note is a good idea; however, it could be improved further if you added a number to the text. I realized where the callout was pointing--towards the "kirin..." line, but it would be easier with a number.

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