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TheFineBrony


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What was seemingly just a day to play, turned out into something so much more. An ordinary day turns extraordinary, when Applejack learns of her true love for her rainbow maned friend. Both realize this is what they want, and they prove it. A normal night in the barn becomes much more than anypony could have ever thought. Does this happen all by chance? Or does somepony influence it?

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Comments ( 26 )

Thanks man. I really appreciate it. Now I really feel the need to write something as well...after we're finished with your rewrite of course.

Hey man, this was really good, I wish it was longer :ajsmug: but I enjoyed everything in it. Do write more. I love AppleDash and this one is one of my favorites, keep on the good work :ajsmug::rainbowkiss:

There are a lot of grammar mistakes with the use of "there" and "their".

puu.sh/2payj

So Rainbow is a player.

And then they had sex.

2330426

lols didn't see that.

2330148

I will fix that. Don't worry.

Not a bad fic for one who doesn't truly believe in the power of appledash.

A few grammatical errors but they don't distract you from the story.

2517077

Thanks, I made this without my editor knowing. I tried my best editing, but as you can tell, it needs some work. I am glad you liked it.

I liked it, but I felt how you described each of them cleaning every part of their body seperately was a little repetitive.

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Glad you liked it. Yeah I understand where you are coming from on that.

:rainbowhuh:: what? We didn't have sex or anything? Dangit.

Great story overall... 9/10 Photo Finish's
:coolphoto::coolphoto::coolphoto::coolphoto::coolphoto::coolphoto::coolphoto::coolphoto::coolphoto:
oh and also,


TROLLESTIA!

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(*slurp*) Twinkies
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2861456 HOW U MAKE LETRZ SO BIG?!

..........my work her is done:trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia:

Comment posted by DarkSonicTrail deleted Sep 13th, 2013

MER WERK HER ERS DERN!!!:trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia:

I swear there are already like 3 stories about them being in a barn...


:ajbemused:

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I know, the idea just came to me so I quickly wrote it.

TROLLESTIA!!!! :trollestia::trollestia::trollestia:

Nice idea and decent story. Grammar and style are a mess. Let me know if you’d like specifics.

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