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Other than a few mistakes... this was romantic and sweet and a great rare ship... Luna x Spike needs a lot more love and this was amazing and quite hot I assure you
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thanks alot to both of you, im glad you enjoyed it. sadly i didn't have an editor for this one but i am glad you still enjoyed it regardless
Noice!
It's been a while since I last read a good SpiLuna fic. Congrats!
7733472 You can say that again, brother!
7733472 You can say that again, brother!
All I got is business and no pleasure!
the Lunar Kingdom has a new heir
I'm the royal fruit wrecker
All night long...
7733931 that literally made my day. Thank you
7733995 You handle Spike like a tool...A tool for goodness
a sex tool?
A jack hammer? My sister of the night sends her thanks, many times over.
The night court will never be the same lame place it was.
Ohh, some nice steamy goodness. Wish there were more good SpikeLuna stories out there, but How To Raise Your Moon hasn't been updated in a while.
Afaik the rules forbid linking to nsfw material (I am talking about the cover pic's source), so it'd be best removed.
7734164 it's a temporary cover until I can finish the one I'm making for it. Thank you for the heads up
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Oh, cover can stay. I was just talking about its source. Which is not the derpibooru link that you removed, but that one also led... places. So it's good that that's gone.
When you mouse over the cover pic, you will see a "Source" pop up in its lower right corner. Clicking leads to the not cropped picture. That source is what needs to go.
Saw the cover art and wondered who was gonna be "working" with Luna.
Me after seeing the only other tag: Spike!?
Never seen that before, I'll have to come back to this.
Some typos/suggestions
hallway(s)
way
limbs
liked(?)
massage
twofold
"its" not "it is"/"it has"
7735023 thank you for that. Overall how did you like it?
That made me lel.
All in all, das pretty good. But you might want to check it for typos brah.
cunalingus, very light cum inflation
I don't know what these things are. But I guess I'll be finding out.
Did you mean, "Apologies, Spike."? For a moment I thought Luna was telling Spike to say he was sorry.
This is totally just a suggestion, but it might have sounded better as.'
By the way, I've really been enjoying your writing style. It has a vibe Lucky can dig.
7735396 thanks for the suggestions. I'm going to edit when I wake up again
i ship it
Nice
Ah, the rare Spuna pairing.
I have read plenty of great clop one-shots on this site, but rarely do I ever want to see the realationship explored further. This is most definitely one of those cases. I also highly enjoyed the use of Spike's piano skills. It's one of the reasons why I like to ship him with Sweetie Belle. To be honest, I feel like most people forget he can play the piano, or have any real skills period. It's disheartening.
I re-read it again. This deserves a sequel that explores a real relationship between Luna and Spike. I humbly offer my help if you ever decide to do it.
7736570 considering I've been a fan of yours sense your story Desires, I may just hit you up on that one. I already have an idea for a second chapter
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7736732 yeah man, no bullshit.
Oh, God yes.
Your paragraphs are quite frankly enormous.
7742305 it's a bad habit of mine
"Sleek"
"Benefactor" or, possibly more appropriate to Luna, "regnant." Spike is Twilight's retainer.
Sounds like she's ordering him to do so. "I apologize, Spike," or "My apologies, Spike," would be more appropriate.
It's a bit weird to see "Spa Ponies" treated like a title. Was that intended?
"Squeal."
"Does." And I think this isn't the only place this typo occurs.
"Rakes."
"...Grand Piano, hoof-crafted from..."
I think 7735023 got the rest.
7755237 I belive so to. I did aquire an editor so hopefully an edited version will be making a debut soon. Thank you for reading and your keen eye
cover link? ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
Love this pairing and this story was simply amazing. Most excellent.
This is probably the best Spike X Luna fanfic I have ever read. I have no words on how it amazing it was, it just made me want to read it everyday. I hope to see more of your stories and I shall give this fanfic a 10/10 best read.
Despite the various errors mentioned above, this story really worked overall and I enjoyed it! Always happy to see such an underrated and underused pairing. I saw much potential in this story!
very, very good. Luna's word choice was odd since it's the most old fashioned that I've seen of any story but it was fun. One of the hottest stories I've seen, you're really good with your descriptions.
I'm sorry, I couldn't get very far into this. I don't mean to be blunt, but you really need to get a proof-reader. Not to mention your paragraphs are absolutely massive, which makes it difficult to read.
For instance, there is a point in the story where Luna considers going to Ponyville, decides she will, informs her sister, watches as her sister writes a letter, exits the castle, greets the guards, gets in the chariot, and flies all the way to Ponyville, all in a SINGLE paragraph. That was dizzying to read.
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I appreciate the feedback
Heh, even with the errors that I'm sure plenty of readers have already mentioned; this was a lovely n' enjoyable story read
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My writing skills still need work. But I'm glad you and all the others have enjoyed it
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yep~
Really romantic with how Spike shows off his skills and Luna just falling for him pretty much.
Wished it did got a second chapter there
Please make a sequel!!!! Please!! I would really like to see like to read what they would do with future visits.