Warning: The following story you are about to read contains M/M shipping between two fictional characters that are consenting adults and a brother that is borderline psychotic. This story is currently unedited. If you don't like any of these, you know where the exit button is.
For the first time, Thorax is going to do something he didn't think he would ever be able to do - ask out Spike, his longtime friend, out on a date. He hopes everything would go right, that this might be the beginning of something great between them. When Spike agrees to go out with him, Phyranx will be there to make sure to let Spike know what to expect if it doesn't go well.
This one-shot is for the M/M Shipping Contest II.
Yeah! ThoraxxSpike!
This was fairly cute, though I feel the addition of the whole Pharynx bit feels off and kind of ruins the vibe a little. Makes it feel a bit forced on Spike's part.
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That's fair. I doubt that I would win with this story either, but for me, I had fun writing it.
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Loved the names chosen. Love the fact the entourage is so... multi-talented. The genuine bazooka is a mite concerning...
I love that it didn't leap from 1st date to madly in love, but there was a possibility for a relationship to grow.
Heh, heh, if Spike finds holding that hoof to be the most natural feeling in the world, our boys are doomed to love each other. 😉
It was a little bit OOC, but Pharynx would absolutely be the insanely protective big brother. This extent of that was just for comedic effect.
A lovely story with one of my favorite ships! I know you're very busy but I would love a sequel to this if time and opportunity allow! Really hoping this places in the contest.
Many thanks!
Thanks for writing more SpiRax. Really underrated ship IMO.
hehe, loved this bit, as well as the rest of the paragraph. great way to set the scene and flesh out the Changeling court. (also, where’s Parsley?)
totally what a well-meaning courtier of a king would earnestly give as unknowingly terrible advice
at the very least being able to eat/taste/whatever feelings would give Changeling advisors a very accurate picture of the emotional state of the king! that would definitely be useful
well, that narrows down the ship pretty quickly! (i do not read tags before starting a story)
Thorax is such a gay disaster i cannot
of all the creatures in the world Thorax finds himself in front of the two who would not be able to figure out why on their own!
well that takes care of that competing ship!
ooh, loving how overdressed he is
oof Thorax is gonna have to be direct
hehe that is fun they have that in common. also love “Celestia on a stick” as an oath
oof, going straight from the ask to the date just like that? Thorax is living on the edge! though this works really well with him having zero experience and being a bit naïve, too!
aww!
that is exactly how i imagine life in Equestria to be, love it
and yeah, that is a lot to absorb in the twenty minutes to get ready for the date!
oh i am loving the psychopathically “supportive” Pharynx here! oof, what is Spike getting himself into…
and, oof! this really is some fantastic backstory, making Pharynx’s motivations and the connection between Thorax and Spike all the more deep. Pharynx representing macho, reactionary thought and his militarism dovetailing with his protectiveness and displaced guilt all come together to make this work so well.
just another Spike adventure!
yeah, Thorax acting like this despite them already being longtime friends is just so Thorax!
oof, terrible, cringy flashbacks to my first times dating now
aww,glad the Tasty Treat gets Thorax’s approval! and i guess the events of “Spice Up Your Life” didn’t end up changing Restaurant Row much in the long-term…
oof, this does sound pretty close to “experimentation”, but at least Spike is honest with himself and Thorax about it
hehe, “straight answer”
aww!
oh boy these muggers are gonna end up hella dead aren’t they
oh no it’s just Pharynx being terrible! augh it’s such an awful thing to do but also 100% exactly what Pharynx would do in this situation and i can see why
aww! yeah, this definitely feels like a natural continuation of the royal court sitcom concept that the show has done a couple of times
i mean if a group of friends is hanging out in Canterlot it has to be at Donut Joe’s, i will brook nothing less!
aww, so true! love this, and love that it’s being expressed through retelling an in-universe work of fiction
what a great way to describe a first kiss, so relatable!
a great gushy, happy ending, building enough on the existing friendship and developed characterization to make it feel earned, with the Pharynx throughline being a very satisfying setup/payoff of the background Changelings. just loved the way it also reïnforced the contrast between Thorax’s inexperience and lack of self-confidence, and him being comfortable in his position of authority over his Changelings. thank you for writing!
This was great! Even without editing, you told a fantastic story. The side plot with Pharynx was a great way to add some levity to an otherwise pretty intimate story, and I think it ended in just the right place. Great work!
Oh yeah, thoraxspike. Gimme gimme!!!!
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