Pipp Petals. Princess of Zephyr Heights, second to the throne, owner of a golden headdress studded with a beautiful emerald that she never takes off.
Neither Hitch, Izzy, Sunny, nor Misty have ever inquired about it. Not even Zipp knows why.
But with one misstep, the truth becomes revealed.
An experiment in mixing past and present-tense storytelling.
Gasp, she a furry !
Why is Zipp snatching it from her? I don’t think that’s the right thing to do; it obviously makes Pipp uncomfortable and Zipp is the mature one.
Actually, it sounds like she’s some cat-like creature, I was imagining something like Allura before this was mentioned.
How is Pipp a changeling? Is she adopted? Why wasn’t this addressed? Is she some pony-changeling hybrid? So her mother has been raising a changeling, yet was still afraid of effing unicorns?!
Story was okay, sets up future conflict and stuff and the grammar was decent, but there’s just a few issues I have with the plot. Gets an OKAY.
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I intentionally left the story open-ended to allow room for potential sequel stories, though I can see how it could have been more neatly wrapped up in an epilogue section of sorts.
As for Zipp, she has a tendency to jump to conclusions a lot and be a bit insensitive when it comes to solving mysteries, as shown with Misty pre-cutie-mark-- hence why she decides to cut right to the chase and tries to tear Pipp's crown off.
Either way, thank you for your feedback. Much appreciated.
Ah, this takes me back to the olden days of the fandom, when little things that most
neurotypicalpeople wouldn’t even notice would be spun into these elaborate stories. Also, am I the only one how thinks that insect Pipp sounds adorable ?11859940
Yeah, what you’re saying about Zipp makes sense, my bad.
Yeah, this one kinda lost me halfway through.