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2142566 Heh. Just noticed this. Glad to help. I don't have time to beta read, but I try to give constructive criticism when I can. Unfortunately I have not yet mattered the art of constructive criticism. At least in real life. I hope that any of my input helped and that you continue writing. Your writing is very good, top tier, at least in fanfiction. Your narrative itself leaves something to be desired, but the hardest part is the dedication, which you seem to have down. I would recommend looking into a class that teaches narrative skills; your tale is not as gripping as it could be; some of that may be sure to my current scatterbrained state, I've been hoping between fics recently. In anycase, keep writing, you can only improve.
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2142566 Heh. Just noticed this. Glad to help. I don't have time to beta read, but I try to give constructive criticism when I can. Unfortunately I have not yet mattered the art of constructive criticism. At least in real life. I hope that any of my input helped and that you continue writing. Your writing is very good, top tier, at least in fanfiction. Your narrative itself leaves something to be desired, but the hardest part is the dedication, which you seem to have down. I would recommend looking into a class that teaches narrative skills; your tale is not as gripping as it could be; some of that may be sure to my current scatterbrained state, I've been hoping between fics recently. In anycase, keep writing, you can only improve.