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Comet Burst


The man without a plan.

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Big Gala is a mare of few words. She's a hard worker, helping her brother run the farm as well as cooking and cleaning up after her family.

Sugarsnap is her best friend. She's a shy pony who only gets chatty around Gala and makes a living working at the local sweet shop.

Thundercloud is the third in the group. She's a pegasus who all the stallions admire. However, she does tend to suffer from stage fright.

Three mares, all best friends in a town of stallions. How do they make it through the day?





R63 Big Mac, Caramel and Thunderlane fic, because I want to write one.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 109 )

Ok... I'll bite... she's going to end up with R63 Cheerilee isn't she?

"Have you seen him?! The guy is a total pushover!"
"T-that's not true," came a very timid voice, evidently Butterscotch.
"Oh please!" Blitz answered, "Gimme five bits!"
"Oh, um, I think I have some here..."

Heh, I don't believe I've ever seen this particular byplay between a Fluttershy and a Rainbow Dash (or derivations thereof).
Original and plausibly in-character. I'm liking this story.

Interesting choice of premise for a fic.

Might as well follow it.

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I'm not a CaraMac shipper, I like CheeriMac.

But that doesn't mean I'm going to have them end up together.

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Trying to, but please don't bring up my other stories here. These comments are for this story.

Interesting premise. Can always go for more Red Gala.

Did you come up with the R63 names yourself or did they come from somewhere else?
I ask because some are a little different than the names Connor Cogwork uses.
eg. Apple Bloom = Applebuck
Scootaloo = Scootaroll

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Better make that Scootaroll.

Riz

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Thank you for making this fic :twilightsmile:

I'm having some personal mental issues.

1. I still can't read them as men because my mind is programmed like a computer to think of the mane 6 as chicks.
2. Even at the apple farm, I still read "yellow" as "yeller" in southern.
3. All of the stallion's voices in my head sound like Kronk. What's up with that?

Dude, Red Gala never gets any fics. Instant like and fave!

clap clap clap to you sir

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wow... omg... you totally ruined the voices for me now... WHHHYY??? (lol)

anyway... I like this, a lot.... I want moar!

Im not usually a fan of R63 stories but you make it work.:twilightsmile:

I love your writing

You're missing a mare here! Everyone overlooks Pokey Pierce!

Clap Clap Clap to you sir-boss

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More like made it better!

It's nice to see an R63 story about someone other than the Mane 6, or Vinyl and Octavia.

Rumor had it that in one of his drawers was a picture of Gala he had saved from that day, something she found rather flattering.

Really? Because I find that rather creepy, frankly.

A rule 63 story?....... I'm intrigued

A rule 63 story featuring Big Mac without the promise of sex?

.......What is this strange world I find myself in?:derpyderp2:

:trixieshiftright:R63 Doctor Whooves later, perhaps?

Man, considering Rainbow Dash was mean to Thunderlane in the one episode, I can't imagine working under the male version as a girl.

Probably a sexual harassment lawsuit waiting to happen.

:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:
5/5 crazy pinkies! Good job!

Everypony's getting hit on by the Mane 6!

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Don't forget your background ponies as well!:rainbowwild:

Can-Can= Bon-Bon
Lyre= Lyra

Plus: more to come next chapter!

I love how the Mane 6 are trying so hard to hit on the girls. I really hope to see more of than with the Thunderlane chapter!

The Elusive
The BlitZ
The Scotch
The Jack
The Dusk
The [Fourth Wall Breach: All hands, abandon deck, abandon deck, abandon deck!]:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

Just read your first chapter yesterday and was surprised about the story. Simply put: very good :twilightsmile:

Was about to comment about it and found out you had released another chapter. That was unexpected..? :yay:

I'm still concerned about that when I first noticed the pic of Red Gala I didn't realize it was R63 Big Mac :applejackunsure: And I'm more concerned about that I haven't ever heard about these "rules"... Maybe something I shouldn't be really concerned of (or annoyed for the popularity of comments shouting about it..?), the story itself is really well made as it is. Eager for more :pinkiehappy:

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Don't really look into them too much.:twilightsmile:

Just know that R63 (or Rule 63) means genderswapped characters.

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Noted. Wasn't going to. Too much information. :applejackconfused:
As long as it makes good stories it's fine for me to not to know of everything :pinkiehappy:

I am enjoying this so far. :twilightsmile:

However, I did catch a couple of typos that slipped through:

when by back is turned

adverting his gaze

So.... no Pokey Pierce? :applecry:

Ah well, still good.

Max

I would really love to see some barb/spines :heart:

Well, didn't see this one coming, but a pleasant surprise indeed!

Had to read the comments to figure out who Sugarsnap was, but I like the 'mane 6 are bad at flirting' angle.

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Heh, this one's been on the backburner for quite a while.:twilightblush: I've been secretly mulling over how to do this correctly, finally just said screw it and wrote.

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You may just get your wish.:derpytongue2:

I wonder what R63 Snowflake/Roid Rage would be like. For that matter what would R63 Wonderbolts be like?

Dang, you work fast. Applause.

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Well, if you go by Snowflake, I'd say... actually all I can think of is Snowdrop.

If you go by Roid Rage/Heavyweigtht/Horsepower, I say... Amazon, is all I got.

As for Wonderbolts...
Spitfire -- Firespout
Soarin -- Glidin (?)
and I don't know the others.

2883006 Glidin looks like it should be pronounced "Glidden," as the paint. Other than that, r63 Wonderbolts wouldn't be much different, would they?

Poor Thundercloud. Working for Rainbow Blitz must suck.

"Mayor Maynot" made me go :rainbowlaugh:

YOU WIN, GOOD SIR

damn dude your keyboard must be on fire cuz you are hot with that speed

2883053 That's a good point. Change the first 'i' to 'y': Glydin.

Wait, no. Now it looks like a guy's name. Hmm... lemme just check Thesaurus.com...

Oh, how about Lofty?

Pretty awesome. Keep 'em coming!

Hmm... A few weeks away at work, only to return and see this...:trixieshiftright:
I'll have to check this out!:pinkiehappy:

Why would they be playing hoofball near the spa? Wouldn't it be better for them to be playing near the farm?

Besides that one issue, this was a fun read. Though halfway through it kinda just felt a bit too much like male bashing for me. Granted, Dusk was kind of an okay guy.

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