The pain of loss is an unusual thing. It can cause heartache and heartbreak, mind numbing madness or mind numbing sadness, and it can even pave the way to blind range and insanity. So what happens in a world of loss? As a freak accident plunges Jason into a world of lost memories, how will he deal with the sudden change?
Edit 9-17-03: I've been fighting the urge to make this into two chapters, but after a midnight editing spree I wound up making a massive addition to what was once just a few lines of stage setting. Long story short, I made a full on prologue and moved it into it's own chapter at the 700 word mark.
Even though I decided Call of Power was a broken story I couldn't stop imagining situations for Jason to get tied up in within the land of ponies. What was originally a fun, zany plot in a collective of 1shots I keep on this site (currently unpublished) became quite a bit more and so I decided to post it as its own story.
Major thanks to ZoidbergIsBestPony for all the help he gives me.
Cover image was patched together by me due to lack of anything better to use, and a refusal to use pony maker in my cover image.
Interesting Premise!
Watch your grammar in the beginning and the end there.
I look forward to seeing this world built up a bit!
2906281 Thanks. What sort of mistakes did you find though? I actually spent time polishing this story as opposed to the write and submit style I tend to go with.
Also, I have ideas for a continuation but I really don't want to start yet another fic only to lose all will to continue writing it like with what happened to the original Call of Power.
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Nothing outrageous, couple of typos, small grammar tweaks. (No matter how many times I go through my chapters I can still find things I missed.)
Biggest grievance though, identify who's speaking as much as possible. Couple of places I got lost for a bit.
PM me an email address if you'd like and if you have Word, I can show you the spots I found with change-tracking.
So is this going to be its own rewrite of Call of Power, independent of it, or a sequel?
If it's a sequel, I recommend closing out the first story into the second, or making this its own story and reexplaining Jason and the Guardians.
Also:
Always separate new speakers (even if its an internal monologue):
Hope this helps!
3221441 Fixed it. I was actually wondering about that. The Oracle speaks purely through telepathy at this point... Know what? I just realized something else I need to fix in it too.
In regards to the rewrite, it's going to be a significant rewrite of the first chapter. I'll be keeping what's there but I'll be adding and changing quite a few things to adjust continuity. Looking back, and knowing what I know now, I really feel like there's a ton of things I should have done differently.
Also, Aren't you supposed to be on vacation?
One last thing, did you find the hidden song link? If you know Metallica it'll be easy.
3221441 Reading back on this I just realized I completely missed something.
This is in no way connected to Call Of Power. This story and that one share the crossover nature to a major story that I have created but I've decided that the storyline I created for Call of Power is broken, and frankly very dull and uninteresting (OP OC battles equally powerful enemies with the help of ponies)
that was amazing for a story this short.
4568460 Thanks! Out of all my stories this is the one I put the most care and effort into and I guess it shows.
4569972 yes it dose.