Shining and Twilight have been connected since her birth. They could read each others' thoughts, see through the others' eyes, and even trade magical power.
Once Nightmare Moon returned, the Elements of Harmony severed the link between the siblings, leaving a near-dead Shining in the midst of a massive assault on Canterlot...
Now he needs to try to find a way to regain his power, while he faces one disaster after another.
Our tale will go through all 3 seasons (hopefully) and all there is in between. Some events will be changed, but the outcomes will remain the same.
Chapters (3)
Well written story but I must say that that, my friend, is an amazing concept. I think it could work very well and I'm looking forward to more, after favouriting this already. :3
First Comment?
Meh I've seen this idea before but a bit more mature than this
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Would that happen to be the Moonrise/99worlds saga by BlackRoseRaven?
Good idea, not sure how it'll end up, but I'll watch I guess.
3035717 nope
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That is a damn good bunch of stories though.
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That it is. Nice to see you again on a story not related to sunlit wombs and or motorcycles.
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But those are the best kind of stories!
I have seen a story like this before except in that one there was no Twilight Sparkle it was just Shining controlling both bodies
3048611 Happen to remember the title? I wrote Separation which was exactly like that. And Soulbound is basically a reboot.
Yea I don't think next chapter will go great with Luna's alter ego basically summoning the smooze... she'll be met with a lot of angry guards...
assuming she survives but w/e.
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Good god thats worse! I haven't decided if these nightmares will return or not, we'll see...
Luna is going to be in hiding for a bit while everything calms down, but yes there will be some heat between her and the Guard, at least for a bit.
3048647 I think it was Separation
3158729 If this is true then yes that was me. I'm basically rebooting that whole thing without the whole Twi trying to kill Shining aspect (which wasn't really going anywhere if i was being honest)
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... ... ... I'm glad. Didn't read the last version. Still good to know something like this isn't going to happen.
3159027 Despite this story centering around Shining, It will show Twi's side of the separation from time to time (How emotionally devastating it is, and how it affects her personality, and the same with Shine), and also whatever info she can uncover. Luna is going to play massive role once she regains her strength.
Is gon be fun
Pretty interesting start, this story has a lot of potential.
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Grammar: 9/10
Pros: -Interesting concept
-Captures and elaborates on Shining Armor's character expertly
- Very eloquent and succinct descriptions
Cons: -Random OCs appear without much elaboration
- Could use more descriptions to paint the scene
- Sometimes hard to tell who's talking
Notes: I hated Shining Armor when I first saw him on the show and kinda dismissed him as a Chucky Cheese Cool goober character but you're starting to change that. You capture his personality (which I find annoying) and somehow turned him to an interesting character I could care about. It's a side character worth exploring, and I'm eager to see where you take this concept.
The bad aspects of your story is more a testament to your strong writing. Your descriptions of Nightmare Moon for instance is fantastic and really puts me into the scene above and beyond what the show provides. I feel you could use more such elaborations of the scene. It's helter skelter at parts, and I'm left trying to sketch the picture using only what the cartoon provides. Also, so far none of the OCs seem to really stand out and stick, though perhaps you intended to develop them further down the line.
Regardless, this is a very good start, and I'm looking forward to more. Whenever you got the time if you could help me with my own story, I'd be much obliged.
3165554 Well I appreciate the review thank you!
In terms of the whole OC thing (You mean Moondancer and Sparkler right?), yeah that could have been handled a little better, or at least Sparkler's case.
You're only going to see Moondancer here and there, but there's a reason for that (spoilers otherwise i'd tell).
The fact that everything seems to be hit or miss with the descriptions is because I was so scatterbrained when I edited it because I was rushing it (i WILL come back and revise it later)
Oh Master Builder! It may be awhile, but I'll certainly read and shoot a review!
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Appreciate it brother.
I like the explanation on the Elements of Harmony relating to Luna and Celestia (as well as why the Mane Six hadn't used them against Sombra) it's one of the things the series has yet, to truly touch upon and has been bugging me for I while.
I think I'll add this to my favorites and give it a like.
I enjoy the fact that you didn't make Shining awesome from the get-go, it makes his character much more three-dimensional and therefor believable.
3169902 If there's one thing you'll want to look out for, it's the mentioning of Sombra
Because everything, and I mean EVERYTHING, goes back to him.
Great story. I am surprised that is hasn't been updated. Best of luck in future stories and chapters.
So is the story finished .....
Please update this story soon, I got to know what happens to Twilight and Shining, I got to know if their link is still there just being blocked or is broken due to the Elements.