This story is a sequel to The Ultimate Alicorn
For thirty years, Twilight Sparkle has ruled Equestria single-hoofedly. For thirty years, she has managed the sun, the moon, the weather and the production of food all over Equestria. For thirty years, she has barely aged, with the combined might and extended lifespans of the deposed former triarchy, and the power of the Alicorn Amulet in her possession.
While the self-appointed Queen of Equestria continues to hold the population in a vicegrip of fear, and the land and seas begin to deteriorate, a secret uprising will form. Unbeknownst to Her Absolute Majesty, new foals are growing and developing their natural magic in secret. After a vision of the future by their mentor, and aided by an elderly recluse, a small band of young fillies and colts will scour the land of Equestria and beyond in search of the one remaining method to restore the world's magic.
Equestria has had enough. The reign of the ultimate alicorn must end.
Winner (long-runners category) of the Twyrant's Kingdom Competition.
Pre-read by JustAnotherTimeLord, The Albinocorn, NightWolf289, PaulAsaran, Comet Burst, MissingLink, Dash The Stampede, and FamousLastWords. Edited by NightWolf289, JustAnotherTimeLord, and Dash The Stampede.
Now featured on:
Fimfiction.net Feature Box (08/01/14)
Equestria Daily!
Rated teen for violence and dark themes.
Pro tip: Submit the story.
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Wow, you beat me to it by 10 mins. Timing: what is it?
Yaaay it's out!
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Sorry it took so long.
Hurray, it's here!
I question where Celestia, Luna, and Cadence are. Are they still in Tartarus, twiddling their thumbs(hooves?) Also, why is Discord dead? I remember how in the last story, Tirek tied him into knots, but that shouldn't be enough to kill him, considering that he tore out his own eyes and was fine.
Also, somehow I doubt that Diamond Tiara, the queen of arrogance and sadism, would simply roll over and mope. She's too full of hatred to do that.
It probably sounds like I hate the story...I don't. I just love nit picking a lot. Let me get to the good part
OMG, THE SEQUEL IS OUT, I AM EXCITED!
Holy buttloads of prereaders. I didn't know their were that many. We have, like, no excuse for letting errors through.
Also, it's out! I am excite.
4781491 he did not have his chaos magic i would presume.
Good start, looking forward to how it develops.
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What LoM said. He was strangled.
Also, the princesses will be explained. In due time of course
Sorry! I fell asleep! There, I blogged for ya
Hurray! I missed the release, but hurray!
Fuck all kinds of yes
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lovin dis shit keep it coming and you will have loads of followers
It has good detail and the charters role fitted into them and it also has a good plot one that can keep pepole reading i see this as a really good planed out but i cant give you a full review until you fished it but i'll be looking forward to see more.I'm putting this on my read later list.
respect homie
Ultimate uprising?
HRH Twilight better keep an eye out for Mister Rogers pony...
Hello popular box.
You hear that? It is the sound of inevitable revolution!
Hello FEATURE BOX!!! *Tips hat* It is an honour to be acquainted with you good sir.
You have just risen to alicorn status. Congrulations.
Off to a great start here! More please!
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Ok , got around to reading this now. Have to say like the transition to the future time seeing how the ponies are living in this time.
I'm still concerned a bit about Twilight's massive change. Turning into a dictator I could understand, but one who just kills when they don't agree seems a bit too much. I understand however it could be since it was such a powerful drive against tirek that it stayed permanently on her due to the amulet.
Await more of this story to see where it goes
Excellent first chapter. I feel very safe favoriting this now.
The scene with Twilight and Flash was just the perfect mix of horrifying and intriguing. Well done there, in particular.
And now the wait begins for me to see how long it takes someone to notice the stealthy ninja-edit I just made
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Thank you for all of your support, guys. Kudos to my editors.
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Great song.
Well, this was a pleasant surprise. Congrats on the feature as well. Now, let the rebellion begin!
So... Implying she wouldn't instantly delete them within a second of confrontation?
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Stick around to find out, if you wish.
But I am sticking around!
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Later, got too many things to read
4783883 I know the feel.
Take your time. The revolution has only just begun, after all.
Wow, using a Twi emote to smile on this fic is... Creepy.
Oh look. Feature timez. Congrats.
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I have no idea what you are talking about. XD
Hmmm... I'm not sure if Flash is sweet, for staying with a pained ruler, or scared, for staying in an abusive relationship with a mentally unstable tyrant.
The road to hell is paved with good intentions...
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Come to think of it, I'm rather surprised that Twilight appears to be respecting Flash's will vis-a-vis his looks and lifespan. Doing what you want with others regardless of their wishes is the essence of tyranny, after all. I suspect if he continues not wanting to be her eternal consort, she'll make him, whether he likes it or not.
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Our Twily is deeper than she appears. Of that, you can be sure.
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I suppose you know best. Still, I can't help but think in his position I'd be plotting to run for the hills before the crazy alicorn decides that my animated corpse is an acceptable substitute.
Then again, my most prominent Dark-tagged story involves the utter destruction of Equestria at the hands of merciless alien invaders, so maybe I'm just prone to thinking in various shades of black.
I'd avoid saying almost. When you're writing about emotions—or descriptors, in this case—there are so many choices that convey so many subtle shades of meaning that saying "almost sad" or "almost angry" is really a poor choice. Saying "he was almost a lawyer" or "almost a chef", is again, a poor choice. Something like, "almost finished" is fine.
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Well, by saying "almost a stallion" I'm trying to tell that he's an older colt, yet not quite full grown. Is there an equine term for that? I'll gladly use it.
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There is no such thing, unfortunately. After they turn four, they're considered a mare or a stallion.
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Hence my use of "almost a stallion" then.
As for the other suggestions you made, I already know all of those.
If you ever see me use almost in a way like that, don't hesitate to send me a virtual slap
In the Equestrian vocabulary, "foolish" becomes "foalish." Much how "everyone" becomes "everypony."
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*commences internal debate on whether or not to apply*
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I'd say you should. In the second episode of season one, when the Mayor yells out, "Seize her! Only she knows where the princess is!" And then Nightmare Moon yelled, "Stand back you foals!"
That clearly was supposed to be "fools", but in the show, it came out as "foals." So therefore, "foolish" would be "foalish."
But this is just a suggestion. Your way works as well.
Great Start ! Can't Wait to see more
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Generally speaking, the show doesn't adhere too much to their ponified words. Not to mention that "foalish," of all the coloquialisms, makes the least sense. It should mean something around childish, but it is used variably, which is fairly odd.
Either way, I see it more as a personal thing anyway. I don't use any of the ponified words, and if I do, it is rare.
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I'm more inclined to believe that Nightmare Moon was comparing the guards to children as an insult.
It would make sense, considering she's older and more powerful than they are.
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Geez man, calm down. I was only making a suggestion. I honestly doubt I've offended the author by saying this.
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So you never say "eveypony/somepony/nopony" when ponies talk in your stories? Hmm, still, you've made some good points.