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Politics are awful, especially when you are the newest princess of Equestria.
But you know what? I don't care. Sadly for me, Celestia does care and she will do everything in her power to teach me a lesson. Sadly for her, I tend to ignore boring things, like, a lot.
So what do I do? Escape to Las Pegasus and start gambling of course!
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Good job. Thoroughly impressed.
tried to teach her a lesson
and she got what she wanted
She seems to resemble a certain whiskey-drowned security mare.....and enjoys gambling........hmmmmmmmmm
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seems like tsunade only more lucky to me
8228956 Glad you like it
8228981 Yeah, guess that’s just Celestia’s luck
8229635 Ok, you got me, I’ve been playing New Vegas a lot lately
Haha1 this is funny! I love the comparison of politics to gambling, and how she humiliated blueblood. Wild card really needs knocked down a peg or two though, and learn some humility. Or else she's headed into Mary-sue territory.
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Name of Story: Wild Card: Princess of Gambling
Total Score out of 10: 6
Pros: The humor, while some times being mildly misplaced or untimely, still felt funny. I feel like you've really tried hard to give Wild Card her own character, making her quite unique. The c/c between politics and gambling intrigued me, especially watching Blueblood get put in his place.
Cons: The story contains lots of exposition, which guts the opportunity for you to write more. I would have loved to have heard the entire backstory revolving around when she first learned she loved gambling, though you seemed to have other plans.
Additional Notes: Grammar is decent enough, though I feel as though your inexperience shows at some points. The whole alicorn thing feels a little unnecessary, considering she was more than capable of handling herself without the royal status, though it's your story in the end.
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Thank you for the review, Jack!
Oh, exposition? Do you mean the first part of the story? Or in general?
Yeah, I don’t hide it, English is not my first language and I wrote this fanfic out of stubbornness, getting an editor can be a good idea
About the alicorn, I didn’t really know how to introduce Wild to the world of politics, she’s not from a noble family and she doesn’t care about politics, so the alicorn thing was the only thing I could think of 
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That's alright! I didn't even know English wasn't your first language, so that makes it more impressive. All in all, not too shabby.
8355781
Oh, I don't know, I think your English and grammar in this story are fine! ^^
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Ladies, ladies... It's obviously a mix between Granny Big Boobs and Security...
Politics are the devil.
Wild Card's idea of politics is a "devil may care" swingin' time in Las Pegasus.
Also, you missed a comma.
"Looks like some ponies just can't handle politics," answered the younger alicorn with a shrug.
Still, a cool story. Wondrous.
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Heh, thanks!
Corrected
... But why? Love it anyway 🤪.
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Nobody cares what a bot thinks 🙄.
Haha, sounds like you're one adventurous princess! Politics can be a real drag, especially when you're new to the whole ruling gig. Celestia might be breathing down your neck, but good on you for finding an escape hatch!
Las Pegasus always seemed a little too flashy for me, but hey, if that's where the fun is, then that's where the fun is! I hear there's a new mobile casino app (wink wink, nudge nudge - https://networkbirdlife.org/mobile-casinos/ ) that's causing quite a stir. Apparently, they have these amazing slot games based on Equestrian legends – griffon treasure hoards, cloud palace jackpots, the whole shebang!
Maybe you could use a little "mare-time" unwinding with some games and who knows, maybe even hit a royal flush while you're at it! Just remember, keep it casual and don't let Celestia get wind of your little gambling getaway.