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Not bad but definitely felt rushed. Could've used more build-up. The dialogue also felt stilted and didn't sound "natural". Maybe it's just me but those are my thoughts so far.
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Yeah, I figured as much. My apologies. I'll see what I can do in the next chapter
Hey, at least it's a way better love story than Twilight being paired up with Flash
Awe! That's such a cute start! Looking forward to the next chapter! Also looking forward to the Rarity story!
Ooh hoo! what is this? are we taking a shot at EQG characters this time around? Nice, im already looking forward to it.
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Yup. And after the next chapter, I'm moving onto Rarity
This is pretty good. So out of curiosity, when will the next chapter be?
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It'll be out soon.
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Cool can't wait. ☺
independant??? apology about the way to say, but somewhere i got interests about this fic.
So, is Rarity going to be next?
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yes, I'll work on her story once I've finished a few other stories
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Okay, cool! Thanks! I really look forward to it!
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Unless he undergoes some major character development in the EG series (when it starts), I see no reason to ship him with Twilight.
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Im hoping he turns out to be evil. Be a good twist.
Wait, they've already been on dates and she's only now giving him her number? Well, better late than never, I suppose.
Wait didn't twilight call him in the first chapter. Wasn't that how she asked him to sugar cube corner. So she had his number and he had hers I think that last part was pointless or it is not a phone number.
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Before she called him, he didn't have her number saved into his contacts or his recent call list. But when she did call him, he took the opportunity to save her phone number into his contacts.
I know im a bit late to the party but i have to say that this is a definate step-up from the previous stories you made, i liked the way you handled the characters of just being everyday people and im happy you didnt go overboard with the boob size this time. overall its a solid read.
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Duh!
Is it me or things are rushed?
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Nope, you're not the only one. Looking back, I also think I rushed it
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YeEeeEt
Jesus, Mrs. Cake, are you selling at cost? Or are you just that desperate to put the nearby Starbucks out of business?
No... that’s what Shrek always says...
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Obviously LOL
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😂lol
Very unexpected....
I wonder if this fic would demoralising Sci-Twi lovers...
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The story was meant for readers who have a crush on Twilight to feel like they have their dream girl. So no, this and all the other waifu fics are meant to give my readers more confidence, to love and be loved
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I...simply agreed with your statement...
What I can't agree is "your sudden depiction" of Twilight Sparkle. People (especially Twi Lovers) thinks that Twilight is just a nerdy, bookish cutie. And you really make Twilight 180°!
I love the sex scene btw, inspiring
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thanks, I'm glad you liked it
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You're welcome
I can't stop reading this one, when I read it again and after awhile. I'll come back to it
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that's nice to hear. I'm glad you like my stories
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Or Timber
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you got that right
Wow! I never knew Twilight Sparkle being passionate about love making. I can't wait to read the other stories.
Well it’s a bit of lost cause to comment on this since you’ve already written all the sequels, but I figured I’d just leave my thoughts as I go.
This one felt a little rushed, albeit not too horribly. There were definitely moments where it felt like sentences seemed to just get monotonous.
However, I’m beyond sure that your writing gets better as I go along, and I’m interested to see how this story shakes out.
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But dude, Twilight giving her number to him was still pointless if that was how it went.
Forgot about the whole "Timber is an adult" thing.
Also, shouldn't he have gone to jail or something?
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Dude, she didn't know
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I know.
Wasnt there a reading on this?