Your dad is out of town.
You've got the whole house to yourself.
You invite Berry Punch over.
You'll find heaven in her hooves tonight.
Pre-read by r5h, Pearple Prose, and re-Yamsmos.
Edited cover by ThePoneDrome. Un-edited art originally by ayahana. If you like my work, consider donating to my Ko-Fi.
The formatting was originally slightly different. You may read that version here.
I suspect it adds nothing much, but that was the how it was intended to be read. Though, FimFic's formatting worked here well enough for me in the end, I'd think.
I give this story a 5/10. Needs more Berry Punch.
9515470
fug
I liked this. I really felt as if I were the main character in all their passion and desire.
That's a really creative way to put it.
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hey, thank you! that's what i was going for, and I'm glad you didn't find the tilde thing overblown, haha
I initially read the second line of the description as "You've got the whole horse to yourself."
9515686
i mean, you've got that too uwu
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Needs tag 'Sad'
9515918
the sad tag is a terrible tag. you should decide how a story makes you feel on your own, not have a tag do it for you.
You are very expressive, as I was reading this, like a video popped up in my head head and started playing every detail you wrote
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....why a scat fic I don't get it
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Thank you very much
that’s all I really want for my writing, to be that immersive, so that really means a lot
As if I wasn't already uncomfortable with how things were playing out.
Fuck.
This bit is like a punch.
No pun intended.
Ouch, Reginald.
Oh.
Okay.
I see those there.
This story feels like you were trying to write a Mature without it being Mature. And this came out. If I had to rate it i would give it a 999999999999999999999999999/10
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it's kinda awesome you came back to this fic almost a year after to reread it