It was only the courage of Derpy Hooves and sheer luck, or perhaps the will of Harmony, that saved Princess Twilight Sparkle from Tempest Shadow's attack. If Derpy hadn't been nearby, if she hadn't bravely jumped in the way, if she hadn't been wearing a Princess Twilight costume, or if that costume hadn't fooled Tempest for just long enough, then Twilight Sparkle would have been captured along with the other princesses.
In another world, Derpy was a little farther away and Twilight was not so lucky.
Now it is up to the other Elements of Harmony and Starlight Glimmer to fight back. They find resistance fighters where they can, gathering up royal guards who escaped the attack, desperate townsponies with nothing to lose, and even the Spirit of Chaos himself (when he's in the mood). They strike where they can, disrupting supply lines and targeting weak outposts. It is a desperate battle, and one that they seem destined to lose.
Their greatest hope lies at the heart of Canterlot, with the four captured princesses. If they can free the Storm King's captives, they'll break his power and finally have a chance to free their beloved homeland. Unfortunately, that means getting past the Storm King's army, the King himself, and the one creature who may be even more dangerous than him: The brutal, ruthless, and seemingly unbeatable leader of his forces, Commander Tempest Shadow.
This looks worth reading... Keep writing.
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Thank you! That's the plan
Finally! I've been waiting for a story like this for some time! Since it's only the first chapter, and the writing is so good, I can't say much apart from great job. Once this pans out a little more, I'll have more to comment on.
The only issue I came across was a missed italic in this sentence.
"After all," Trixie continued, "any pony who could defeat The Great and Powerful Trixie—though only on a technicality, mind you, and she did[/i ]cheat—could never be harmed by those invaders!"
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Whoops. You'd think I'd have noticed that a huge chunk of the chapter was in italics. Thanks for the catch!
Alondro sighs and uses magic to accelerate a small rock to several hundred mph, which he then directs from afar into Tempest's skull when her back is turned. She dies instantly.
(See, magical sniping is really effective when no one's ever thought of it before.)
This story had better not die after only one chapter!
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Don't worry! Chapter 2 is already written and I'm working on 3. The plan is to update every Sunday, and I'm hoping to stay at least one chapter ahead of those deadlines.
Amazing. I cant wait for more :)
I am going to be FURIOUS if you decide to reform Tempest like in the movie after you just showed her MURDER somepony. Frankly, I'm all for an alternate universe with a more evil Tempest Shadow that gets killed during the final battle. And the Storm King is so goofy and silly, I'd actually wouldn't mind if you reformed him instead.
Are you going to delve into other what-ifs? The ending sort of seems to be setting up a "Tempest Shadow takes the Staff of Sacanas from the Storm King" scenario
9661929 I wasn't planning one like that just yet, but I do love a good what-if.
Actually, one of my other fics (on hiatus now, sadly, from lack of interest) was a what-if Sunset Shimmer won in the first EQG movie.
You didn't think it would be that easy, did you, Starlight?
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You know, for a second there, she really did.
i'm hoping to see Sunset Shimmer and Lightning Dust join the resistance. Sunset would be of great magical help, and it would be very interesting to see how Rainbow and lightning would be as resistance allies
faust forgive us if we let Blueblood have complete control of Equestria
damn it Starlight, you are in the castle of friendship. go through the mirror and bring back Sunset Shimmer. she was a former student of Celestia after all
Now I'm wondering where exactly was Flurry Heart during the movie... or more accurately who was watching her?
I assume the Changelings where busy rebuilding after The Fall of Chrysalis
But is it an Academy Record?
Geez she's dark, are you sure she isn't part of the DC-universe
When is the next chapter gonna come?
Wheees the next chapter
This story is so good! Please don’t stop it!
Is this being continued? If so, no rush
He then directs from afar into Tempest's skull when her back is turned. She dies instantly on vidmate.
Dash needs lightning dusts help
Hell yeah! One of my favorite movie stories is back up and kicking! Don’t kick yourself about the late updates, I’m just glad you’re back for it.
Ha! No
Intriguing characterization of Tempest here. I like her emotional detachment, possibly even suppression/repression? Anyways, I look forward to seeing where this story goes.