Pinkie lives to make others smile.
But the world is far from a nice place, and not everypony deserves to smile. For the sake of Equestria, perhaps it is best for some ponies to be left to drown in their own misery.
Faced with such a pony, Pinkie is left with a choice. To make this pony smile, no matter the cost. Or to preserve her own happiness.
Then again, it's not like she ever had a choice.
** This is a tragedy. Warning so you know what you are getting into.
Sex is discussed and reflected on, but not shown.
Part of the How We Lost It series, inspired by Fluttershy's Night Out
Proofread by Schattendrache
Other Stories in the How We Lost It series:
Twilight: Running Away from Destiny
Applejack: A Simple Pony
Rarity: What is a Worthy Man?
Rainbow Dash: Deathbed Thoughts
Fluttershy: Coming soon!
Hoooleeeee sheeeeeeit. That was impressive. Well written and an interesting way to look at Pinkie's talent.
Again, I am impressed.
Okay, now cast a spell that makes Pinkie Pie forget the last week of time and it is mostly fixed. She actually did get the murderpony to smile, and most of what lost cause did would be revoked. The main issue would be if Pinkie were pregnant(unlikely in her current state, but in that case this could self-fix when she had the foal.)
...Remember that thing you said yesterday? About how we were all going to hate you for this story?
In my case, at least, you were absolutely right. That's not a good thing.
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Hey, I gave ample warning for this story with the tags and warning in the long description haha.
Though I'm curious. Why specifically do you hate it?
I sincerely hope it's not just because bad things happen to Pinkie.
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Oh, God no. I'd like to think I have thicker skin than that, thank you very much.
Oh, I could write an entire freaking essay about why I hated this. However, by this point I just want to be done with this story, so instead, I'll just give you a couple bullet points:
Look, you're a damned good writer, and I've loved most of the other stuff you've published in recently memory. But with this story, you managed to piss off both me as a critic and me as a person; a rare feat, I'd reckon.
And as I said before, that's not a good thing.
Sorry for wasting your time.
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You can't. Pinkie died at the end.
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When did the story imply that the readers were supposed to forgive Lost Cause? You're supposed to hate her haha.
You're free to think that, and it's not a wrong way to think. It's just that in my own personal interpretation of Pinkie, she'd defnitely end up doing something incredibly dumb and self-destructive like this.
You're not supposed to agree with it, and it's not the right decision. But it is the decision I believe Pinkie would make based on my own interpretation of her.
If you're talking about Lost Cause's "woe is me" personality, then that was a front/lie to get Pinkie's sympathy. Lost Cause's real personality is shown in the ending scene with her.
Overall, none of your points are exactly wrong. It's just that this story is incredibly interesting and thought-provoking to me, which is why I wrote it. And it fits perfectly with my own personal interpretation of Pinkie. I knew from the beginning that it'd piss others off. I always wanted to see a true dark mirror of Pinkie, and how Pinkie would confront that.
And you didn't waste my time haha. I'm glad you enjoyed my other stories. I usually do a "one for me, one for them" with my stories. Consider this one for me ;)
Also:
Pinkie isn't dead.
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I got that we as readers were supposed to hate Lost Cause, but the fact that Pinkie doesn't—
—is something I find downright asinine. I'm appalled by the notion of Pinkie considering her permanent lobotomization a victory.
If that's the decision you think she'd make, that's perfectly fine. I get that.
But as for me, personally? See the bullet point about the villains Pinkie assisted in incinerating, smashing to bits, and encasing in stone.
...Huh. That's something I'll admit I didn't fully catch on to, and that's entirely on me. I've partly changed my mind in that regard.
On the other hand... her real personality is "raping and torturing ponies"? Doesn't seem like a huge step up, if I'm being honest.
My persisting qualms aside, thanks for the response—especially seeing as my original comments were a bit... curt, for lack of a better word. You certainly riled me up, I'll give you that.
Take care.
(Unless you want to respond to this comment too. Whatever works best for you, really.)
:)
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Imagine if any of those villains met Pinkie one on one and asked her to give them a happier life. You don't think Pinkie would take it as a challenge to help them? Keep in mind those villains you pointed out were actively attacking Equestria. Lost Cause wasn't actively doing anything in Pinkie's eyes until the very end of the story. Big difference there, since Lost Cause was not an active threat like those villains.
Well, she is Pinkie's dark mirror. Pinkie's special talent is to spread laughter and happiness, and Lost Cause's special talent is to spread misery and suffering.
The reason she raped Pinkie is because Pinkie came out as asexual in this fic. Lost Cause causes suffering based on the best way to hurt her victim, and Pinkie admitted that losing her virginity would cause her to lose her connection to her Element.
Feel free to be as harsh as possible haha. It's always interesting seeing how my interpretation of the characters and others' interpretation conflicts :)
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Of course Pinkie could be incorrect about losing her connection to the element. She pretty much said that she couldn't love(eros) other ponies because she loves(agape/philia) all other ponies and that would set one above all the others. Essentially she lost herself here and the mind wipe of the last week should be able to fix things. It is one of the few cases where I would espouse that sort of mind magic. Oddly enough this is the second time recently where I would condone use of mind magic on a pony and usually I am very against that sort of thing in a general way. Also oddly enough both cases involved rape of a pony.
Oh, as for hating lost soul -- that is a problem with cutie marks. Cozy Glow was doomed the minute her mark came in. Same with this pony. This is one major thing with fillies/colts. They get the wrong cutie mark and they are really stuck, as completely denying your mark and working against it is not in a pony's nature. There might actually be a place for Starlight Glimmer's cutie mark spell.
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Yep. Even though I believe that ponies can go against their cutie mark if they truly wish to, it's so rare that we never even see it in the show. Which is why I don't really consider Lost Cause a villain, since she never had a say in her life's story. That doesn't make her any less disgusting and deserving of hate, though.
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Really glad you enjoyed it
Holy shit this is very dark. Not the kind that makes you rage on the inside for what the characters did, but the kind that makes you feel empty. Having said that, I'm glad you wrote this story. A new perspective on the world of pones is truly refreshing, even if it rips your heart out.
Imagine if MLP is rated 18+/M instead of a kids show. I'm curious how the show creator and writers would handle subjects like this.
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Making people feel empty was my goal haha. Glad you liked it!
I kind of hope that when this little series finishes, you do a series that could be considered "equal but opposite": Just as deep, but instead of making the readers feel empty or sad, it makes them feel happy.
Um, sorry if I'm being a nitpicky asshole, but most ponies are always naked, so saying "even if she was naked" doesn't really hold any weight.
The rest of it does, though, so I'll shut up...
I was very tempted to make a joke about them not being alone because there are hundreds of them, but I decided against it.
Actually-
"YE FECKIN' IDIOTS! IF THERE ARE HUNDREDS OF YOU, YER NOT ALONE! QUIT BEIN' FECKIN' DEBBIE DOWNERS, AND SOCIALIZE MORE, YE PALE FREAKS!"
I am so sorry...
Hey! That's what my family call me all the time!
...
That's a good thing, right?
"Shit, I think I need to replace my graphics card again." Pinkie said, her brow furrowing.
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I'm expecting an "I see dead people" joke for some reason.
Yeah, this is where I head out-
jk jk
Reminds me of a random horror movie I watched recently.
Yeah, anyway, that was not what I was expecting.
At all.
yet, it was still pretty good.
9/10
Time to move to the next chapter.
Well.
That's a dramatic conclusion to come to.
Ngl, I think we should vote Lost Cause, she seeming kinda sus
Welp, this is where we grab the FBI.
What.
The.
Actual.
Fuck.
This..
I don't know how to feel about this.
Anyway, that gave me actual chills.
I never want to read that again.
10/10
Anyway, I schleep
Dayum, this is some deep shit right here.
I love it. Very well done.
Apparently this is why your username is Deep. Seriously, I knew this would be a tragedy but this is one of the darkest stories I've read on Fimfiction in a while. Ouch...
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Can't believe I didn't respond to this yet.
I was actually really nervous about publishing this, since I knew a lot of people wouldn't like it. But this story was just too interesting *to me* not to publish.
Check out the other short stories in this little series. You'll probably like them too.
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This is part of a series?! I need to read all of these IMMEDIATELY!! *dashes off and leaves a cloud of dust behind*
Nope, not healthy at all. Haven't read this fic yet but reading the tags gives me a good idea where this is going...
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Warning, this is pretty dark haha.