On her birthday, Pipp has a stream and a shower but not at the same time. She probably had a cake too but I ate up too many words to write about that so just pretend.
Written for One Thousand Words because I noticed it was there. And they mean one thousand words, not "about one thousand words if we assume one word is five-six letters".
"NoticeMeSenpipp"
Great story! I'm really enjoying seeing everyone's explanations for Pipp's eye colors. I didn't expect that ending!
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I actually hadn't noticed until like a few days ago that Pipp's eyes are a different color in almost every picture of her. I saw somebody else write a fic where she's a changeling but I felt that this was a much more reasonable explanation, at least the idea that she wears contacts. The part where her eyes remind her of her father actually didn't come up at first and I suddenly had that idea at... some point or another in writing!
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That's the one I read too!
The difference in the two stories is intriguing to me - Zipp and Haven are magically coerced into love in the other one, and Zipp is knowingly protecting her sister within the stream in this one :)
They're both sad, but this fic is a little more heartwarming!
I recorded reading this to make it into an audiobook, I hope you don't mind, I did ask first, but it's time for me to go ahead with it and hope you approve.
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Go ahead! I might not be able to find time to listen to it right now though, sorry. x(
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Just glad I have your permission, cause it already done and planned for my 1000k word week.
This is so heartwarming yet sad
And in time, he became a king by his own hoof. But that is a story for another day...
Having already read the "Pipp is a changeling story," this one threw me off for a bit, but that's on my end. You convey an impressive emotional impact with very few words in that ending. Honestly, the only thing that bothers me is ponies using cat-ear headphones. That's how their ears already look.
In all seriousness, nicely executed all around. Thank you for it and best of luck in the judging.
Someone has pointed out an embarrassing typo that I could probably fix without altering the word count. However, I'm going to wait until the contest is over anyway just to be sure it doesn't screw that up. Then I'll fix it and pretend it was never there like I do with all my other typos.
Contest finished! I didn't win anything.
I fixed that typo that I didn't make. What typo? There was a typo? Nuh uh, look for yourself, not there anymore. Was never there, actually.
hehe, great name
and that does explain why her eye color is inconsistent between shows, very nice
ah interesting, hinting that Pipp is actually older than how she presents herself as being?
hehe, "Ilu"
oof, hints at who Pipp and Zipp's father really was? in any case, great segue into an emotionally heavy moment before the end, there is so much good angst in being pained by traits reminding one of a parent, which in this case i gather is due to some awfulness on their part
Misread at first and thought she was a Frankenpony
Story title: In Her Eyes
Paul McCartney circa 1966: you see nothing, no sign of love behind the tears cried for no one, a love that should have lasted years