While swimming at the beach, a woman arises from the water. Running into her was a surprise but you were more in awe at how beautiful she was; and you can’t help but wonder. Who is this mysterious beauty?
Story includes: [F4M] [Curvy Momma] [Older Woman] [Walking and chatting] [Words of wisdom] [Helping hand]
Definitely an interesting story but I'm rather perplexed by this bit. I get this is supposed to be reader's perspective but maybe make the age range a bit clearer.
Sexy Celestia!!
I think you have the right idea...but the opening chapters are exposition that does little to add to the romance. None of those details play a role in how Celestia and Anon get to know one another.
Don't get me wrong: I like this kind of story, but the execution of it is middling.
Just trying to offer the criticism that will help you improve is all.
Next chapter or sequel when?