“10 years ago I left my hometown of Ponyville after doing something stupid not that I regret it but I could not face the shame. I was worried of what pony’s would think about me so I left town in the middle of the night after. After I finally get the courage to escape my abusive husband I finally return”
Interesting premise, nice start, good spelling. But you really need to use the proper punctuation that separates the characters dialogues from the narrator.
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Do you mean the quotation marks?
To mention some examples:
After the 'whispered' there should be a dot '.' or a comma ',' or even a colon ':'.
A period is required after the 'wake up' since the character has finished speaking.
The same after the 'Mummy'.
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Thanks for the feedback, I’ll keep that in mind
This is very good. I'm giving you six stars for doing a good job. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐