Sunset Shimmer and Capper Dapperpaws find out the answer to the age old question: do cats enjoy playing in the snow?
Written for eiggengrau for Jinglemas 2023
I am amputee bat pony. I am a former royal guard.
Sunset Shimmer and Capper Dapperpaws find out the answer to the age old question: do cats enjoy playing in the snow?
Written for eiggengrau for Jinglemas 2023
Good fun, thank you! (So says the benighted individual who supplied the prompt for this story.)
Agreed
cue The more you know sfx
So I liked it, but Capper kind of trails on and off and uses a bunch of words that aren't really necessary.
Not only is it a pain to follow and drags the scene on for way too long, but does it not feel like Capper to talk like that.
Maybe work a little on your dialogue a little in the future.
If your looking to fill the word quota, a outing for Breakfast might provide some extra words to say in between the scene descriptions and setup.