Equestria has changed, magic is now a distant memory. The tribes have split apart. Twilight's rule has long since failed. The Dark age is here.
Yet there is still another. Come, see the journey, where it began. For yet, hope remains while the love and friendship remains true. Hope is coming.
Flurry Heart's tale is not yet finished.
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The encroaching winds batters the hollow structure, a grandeur left to wither and stood tested as its forbears times long past.
Thought I hadn't seen the animated series nor make your mark show in the MLP gen 5 era. I had watched the introductions that is the MLP the new generation. I had wondered what happened to the crystal ponies, being they were physically crystalline than the usual meat and fur outline of most Earth, Pegasus, and unicorns present in the show showcases.
Hopeful the stories goes another mile to explain the disappearance of a once prosperous people and legacy left behind.
The sentence beforehand could've been separated from the paragraph detailing the perspective of Princess Flurry Heart via "
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and to all other changes in perspectives should separation be considered to allow flow of story amicable.
The story is doing well so far. A quint balance between world building and dialogue.
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Your feedback is very much appreciated. I will take it into account when i do more of these. I have however seen plenty of good fics that havent needed to do that and the switches were still quite clear.
If you have a recommendation as to how i could do that. I would be open to hearing it.
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I truly am thankful for this comment, it makes me smile and I will endeavor to do that justice.
As of now finished chapter 3's. The ending has the right amount of tension, that it may invite future readers to further be enticed to read later chapters.
Contineue steamroll through!
Outstanding work this chapter was.
The sentences aided by dialogue is an improvement over the previous chapter, and along with in-depth emotions depicted to the actions coincide the dialogue is presentive of the terrible catastrophe occurring in Equestria over the 'Unity Regression' event between ponies.
Some mistakes were made according to the significance of the term mentioned such as;
Capital should be mentioned in Canterlot. an overlooked word it be of no concern. Do improve as do all authors do.
A suggestion it be limit the minimum of 4, maximum 5 sentences as a standalone paragraph. It would lessened the fatigue encountered the viewer and overall allow more rest stops for the reader to take time to apprehend the content you've produced.
Nonetheless excellent work! Have a pleasant Morning Sir Blue-bolt.
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Just glad I could make a good enough Fic. Things are unraveling fast for Equestria and now the clock is ticking.