As everypony might guess, standing as a statue is boring! Even worse for Discord. But would it be that bad if there was another to talk to?
As everypony might guess, standing as a statue is boring! Even worse for Discord. But would it be that bad if there was another to talk to?
cool shit man
This needs mmore views. it's dececntly well written, and the plot is pretty freakin awesome. Keep it up man.
This is actually very well done! Discord, Being my Favorite Villain, is definitely feeling emotions I didn't think were possible, but they feel natural all the same. you've done well, and expect more outta you!
I like. Continue please.
Tracked and ready for action! Waiting for more!
Ok this story has a lot of potential but I see two very glaring issues.
1. How is Celestia supposed to beat the Draconequuis? A single Draconequuis, Discord is like unto a God. He plunged the world into Chaos twice and it took the Elements of Harmony just to beat him.
2.Would Twilight and co really agree to imprison an entire species in stone or aid in their banishment? When for the last millennia, all they've done is mind their own business.
And would such an action not raise some sort of rebellious thoughts throughout the land? Discord misbehaves so she turns his race into stone and banishes the rest? Who's next? The Dragons (Fire breathing monsters.), Griffins (Another hybrid race.), Donkeys, Zebra,Buffalo or Diamond Dogs? I know it's nitpicky and this is all just from Discord's POV and anyone else Celestia sticks in her garden, but it's something that you should address and strengthen the believability of the story as a whole.
The story is still very good and well written, with a good premise, but these background issue's would really bother me as I read.
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I can see your point. I'll be issuing that eventually in the story. Thanks for bringing it up, I wouldn't have noticed those gaps in the story!
201264 No problem, it's always best to catch these problems early in the story. You could totally add a lot of depth to this story if Celestia is shown forcibly evicting a Draconequuis who is living peacefully amongst Ponies and actively living the life of harmony. If you're going for that Tyrant Celestia vibe. You could also have Luna trying to help some Draconequuis flee Equestria or trying to reason with her sister.
Of course all of this could be a big prelude to the arrive of *drum roll please* Daymare Sun/Queen Solar Flare. But I think that's probably a fic for another day
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I see what you are saying, but I don't know who you are talking about when you mention Daymare Sun/Queen Solar Flare...
201569 By Daymare Sun/Solar Flare I mean a Celestia who has become as corrupt as Nightmare Moon. The names are two I recall cropping up in a lot of Tyrant Celestia/ Celestia turns evil stories. And figured you would probably recognize the name.
Generally she becomes obsessed with bringing Harmony which turns into an obsession to maintain order and control which then become her main focus. Kind of a Gate to Hell is paved with good intentions sort of thing
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Totally get it now.
Sounds like it'll be an interesting premise
Awww.... you got my attention my good sir. lets see what happens next...
I was drinking chocolate milk when I read this.... AHAHa oh.....
Interesting as well as awesomely written, heck who am I kiddin'? I can't type down stuff that makes sense to save meh life. but I digress, or whatever the word is.
Awesome story though *sunglasses*
Feeling sorry for Soarin', but still found this chapter hilarious.
i relly want equestria to be real...so i can kill that fucking bitch
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why? he's fun! it's Q in the ponyverse!
not discord you fool! i mean that tyrant! celestia!
Dun DUN DUN... and the plot advances.....
I must say, thank you all for the amazing positive responses!
I never really expected such a good reaction out of this story. I had originally thought it to be something quick, but you guys are proving me otherwise! I'll be sure to keep pumping out these chapters as fast as I can, without rushing the story. It should be much easier now, since the chapters are much shorter than some other stories I've written.
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If you feel it needs more views, by all means, share it! Same goes with everypony else! If you wish to share this story, or any others, with somepony else who would enjoy it, I would be quite grateful, as I'm hoping to become a little better known here.
Also, if you wish to as well, I have a couple other stories up. One is on hold as I'm writing this one, but feel free to read it anyway! The other one is a one chapter story, but is about the same length as this one so far. Any attention is graciously appreciated!
Anyway, thanks again, and KEEP ON READING!
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i wonder who this other Draconequus is? nice job so far.
I DEMAND MO- *Punches himself*
Sorry i get like that when i read a great story.
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Oh, well, thanks! Don't need to beat yourself up over it, though.
Daring Do approves *winks*
"he didn't take a step outside and or when he broke up" - Double space. Also, what?
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Thanks for catching that! No idea what I was thinking there...
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Yes, quite the Derpy moment there!
354318 a.deviantart.net/avatars/t/e/tealcindeedplz.jpg
Jeez, hard to believe a society based around constantly recording things would create something like Discord.
This is relevant to my interests :3
Yay. New chapter .
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Hey, i didn't know you liked this story
I have liked this story, but here I will have to make an input.
For a race made up of extremely powerful chaos... things, it does very little sense to have a society with rules.
Also, it seems overpowered.
Eris?
I fucking knew it.
Favoriting.
So this isnt dead, good to know
Yeah, I know this has been dead for a long time, but I plan on finishing this along with every other story I have in mind.
That's for your dedication, though!
still alive ^^
Lets see if Eris moves in the direction I think she might take
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Well, we might just have to see, now won't we!
But, I am curious what you think might happen!
Please learn the difference between "its" and "it's"
I always find it odd when a really good story, especially one with so many views and likes, has no comments for a chapter...
So I'm assuming this story is dead
I like it! ...But you should know, the proper purel for draconequus is draconequi.
Good. It is no less than she deserves for exiling an entire race based on the actions of one individual member of that race.
3556142 I wish I wasn't, but it's almost definitely dead.