Posted New Story! · 11:07am Aug 6th, 2023
That's it. Totally a thing. Posting a story. Enjoy!
Writer of odd, strange and thrilling consquences.
That's it. Totally a thing. Posting a story. Enjoy!
Just a quick update. I am moving my focus onto my long form mystery Lyra-is-a-ancient thing story. Though, I am not sure how long it's going to be at the moment.
I did write yesterday and on my way to finishing chapter 2. Chapter 1 is very polished. But, I don't want to post my novel ,until the whole thing is done to my specifications.
I am also looking for way's to improve my drafting process. For now noting what work's- that kind of thing.
This is my work in progress. I was inspired by a story called Lyres Gambit and other Lyra is a weird pone stories. Also, hundred's of stories I have read over the year's.
So! Enjoy this opening snippet of my new long form!
I got my first ten by Claude! I am starting to think it's not as difficult (at least in flash fiction?) to push for a ten from a nine. I have this weird block in writing longer paragraph's? Don't know...
Weird, huh?
This makes me want to write for other fandom's or play with more original character work! How is my ability in coming up with weird premises? Can I put my skill into long form? I think I can! Betcha thought I was gonna be all doubtful and such...
Nope!
Enjoy!
Nothing to report other ,then this was funner and found a cool title out of it!
Enjoy!
Title: He had knelled once.
“I will bleed you, Alicorn!”
Sin’s Field’s were aflame. Her Soldier's dead. The whiff of vomit and the last shit linger in the air. And, still he remained, Dawn raised in the blood-red glow of his magic.
I had a good time with this one! Got a good score too. Didn't even have to work to hard...
Nothing to say other then, adding detail reduced my score. After review both...it mainly was because the story well, richer in detail and fleshing out other character's it losed the super tight focus on old Red.
So, here you go a super tight narrative piece on one of Red's troubled day's in his long life.
So...This was unwieldy. I had one version that I liked better because then it had more evocative detail. I was trying to learn how to add detail without sacrificing the story...well...my beautiful pacing got shot...
Then...I got a high score from the review from Claude and I was really happy. But, wanting to always improve...I added more detail...and more detail and better opening and then...
My pacing was gone.
My spicy character work was gone and...now...
sigh...I got a six.
I feel weird. Sometimes when I write-
I like it. Sometimes, I don't and that's mostly because I strive to write how I "should" write. Like most of the people I follow all write in fairly long sentences with even, more of narrow margin of fragmenting sentences then I do...
I like what I write but, I haven't been writing very long...
I did not time myself this time. Though, I did write a first draft by hand. It was rather relaxing.
So, I here me go!
Her hooves pound the dance floor, her heart beat’s Vinyl’s song into her blood. Blood that is slog and the bog of the Everfree and she wonder’s then, if she can cast spell’s with her hooves…
Could I? And, for a moment she was there with AJ her hooves on her’s and-
This is very short flash fiction. Ironically, though, I call what i do flash fiction...is it? In my opinion flash fiction can be anything...but! What I am used to is a sparse few lines carefully chosen...so, this is what I give you...
I have seen flash fiction only two sentence! (They were really good! it's partially where i get my writing style from!)