Idea Expanded: Dead Note · 5:06am Dec 4th, 2013
Hey, I was told to give this a shot. Here is a sneak peek of my new story idea, tell me what you like or dislike about it.
I stepped onto the train station, taking a long, deep sniff of the air around me. I closed my eyes, hoping to get a better sense of what was around me. As my lungs reached full capacity, I let out a deep sigh that quickly turned into a yawn, then opened my eyes.
I nearly fell back into the train because of the pink face that had filled my vision, opening my mouth in a silent scream. I recomposed myself the best I could while the pink pony laughed; when I got up I started glaring daggers at her, meeting her light cerulean eyes with my own.
"Ooh," The pink surprise pony started in a high pitch, staring back. "You have the same eye color as me! Isn't that awesome?" I sighed, ready to disappoint her, but also ready to get her away from me so I could enjoy a walk around the new town.
As she waited for an answer, she kept staring at me in wonder, looking into my eyes with a continuously un-blinking stare. It was starting to get creepy.
I waved a hoof in-front of her face, snapping her out of her stare, thankfully, but then she started talking in that cheerful, bubbly voice again. "Oh, sorry, I do that a lot when I find the same color eyes as mine, really takes me somewhere else. What's your name?" She extended a hoof to me, and I motioned to my Cutie Mark after my hoof came in contact with hers.
It was a straight, horizontal line, with a note in the middle that was crossed out. Freeing my hoof from hers, I tapped my throat and shook my head slightly from side to side, hoping to get the point across.
"Ooh, charades? I love that game!" She suddenly went silent, starting to pose and make gestures with her hooves in a dramatic fashion, her eyes wide. I stared blankly at her, deadpanning with my eyes as she continued without a care.
I let out a quick exasperated sigh and started trotting into the town, thankfully un-interrupted as the pink abomination quickly went to meet the several other new arrivals to town, addressing them each in a similar cheerful manner.
That's all I can share for now, as I literally just started writing this out. Thanks to BikerDash for helping me out.
WOW!!! I never thought of how much a headache Pinkie would be for someone in his situation...
THIS GUNNA BE GOOD!!!
1570483 If I can get myself back into writing with the 15k+ words that I already have in an action fic. That burned me out, but I got some great work out of it. And yeah, Pinkie is going to be quite the trouble for him.
Injuries and silent threats, ho!
1570483 Oh man, I just thought of a way to make this so much sadder. His name in the story is Dead Note, reference to those that have seen anime, but he used to be Perfect Note, one of the best singers Equestria had ever known.
Then he got into an accident and had to have his voice box removed just to be able to live. Going from one of the best singers to not being able to even speak? Oh MAN the feels.
Sound good?
Edit: and he used black paint to make the cross on the note, signifying his loss.
1571552 Holy hell, that IS sad. I am very much looking forward to reading this one now.