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Thunderbug80


* EQD Blogpony * Best Author nominee: 2013 Pony Awards * Thirteen time featured writer on Equestria Daily * Panelist: Ponycon AU 2014/2015, Salvagecon, and Alicon 2018/2019.

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  • 200 weeks
    Golly!:Chinese Translation

    Disharmony Tree has taken the effort to translate my story, Golly! Into Chinese.

    I've read the Chinese version (translated back to English, thank you Google) and I love it.

    I've added a link to the story description for all who are interested.

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  • 209 weeks
    Sequel?

    Hm...

    There may be something in the works. Maybe.

    It might have something to do with a certain pesky pegasus filly and her stress-case alicorn rival. Do you guys want to see what happens?

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  • 209 weeks
    Discord (Server, Not the Character)

    Howdy, folks.

    I figure since I'm (kind of) back in the writing game, I might as well post a link to my Discord server. Why?

    • It's a way for you to remind me to get off my rear and get to writing
    • It's a way for you to suggest a story idea and ensure I actually see it
    • It's a way to potentially get a sneak-peak at unpublished stories or chapters and provide feedback

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  • 209 weeks
    What Should I Do?

    Okay, I have a problem.

    As I mentioned last week, Knighty was able to restore the first story I started writing: The Final Element. It's definitely rough, but it has a special place in my heart, and I actually progressed the story a fair bit before I put it on hiatus for a rewrite. Then I took notes for the rewrite and deleted the original story so I could write the new version.

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  • 209 weeks
    Oh My Golly

    Featured!

    Oh my word, it's been 6 years since I had a new featured story.

    THANK YOU so much!

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Feb
13th
2015

Additional Info on 'Allure' (Spoilers!) · 10:09pm Feb 13th, 2015

Right.

First thing's first. If you haven't read Allure yet, stop right here. There are spoilers ahead. This blog is for those who have just finished reading it.

Now that that's settled, I would firstly like to thank Cold in Gardez and Themaskedferret for their help with editing the story. It was made all the better for it.

Now for a few insights into the story that you may not catch the first time reading it.

1) It was originally pointed out during the editing process that it's a little out-of-character for Rarity to hold Allure in her hooves, as she tends to use her magic even more often than Twilight does to carry things around.

This is intentional, as the book's magic has already grasped her. She uses her hooves because the magic causes her to become somewhat possessive of the book, as can be seen when she clutches it to her chest several times.

2) There are little hints as to what's really going on all over the place. I even had a little fun with one of the passages in the book speaking directly to you, the reader. See as follows:

Everything has beauty, but not everypony sees it. Some are blind to the subtle details that everything possesses which, if magnified, suddenly become obvious. Others have lived too long to give such things more than a cursory glance. They have grown old and do not appreciate that which is in plain sight. But youth... youth is happy because it has the capacity to see beauty, and those who hold onto this ability shall never grow old.

Now replace beauty with hints, and suddenly this passage is speaking to the reader about how you can tell early on what is happening if you look hard enough at what is hidden in plain sight. In fact, the final line of that passage spells out the plot entirely.

Not that it should come as a big surprise, since this plotline is fully revealed shortly thereafter. I just wanted to have a little fun with it.

3) It was suggested during pre-reading that Rarity's confrontation with Allure might be more interesting if the book could actually speak back to her in some way.

I seriously considered this suggestion, but ultimately decided that I prefer the internal argument Rarity has with herself, as it seems like something that might happen on the show.

4) It has been mentioned that there is an Inspiration Manifestation feel to the story. I agree, though to be honest it actually didn't occur to me until pre-readers brought it up.

5) There is a bit of wordplay going on. Of course, the main reveal is that Allure was actually a mistranslation of A Lure, but that's not the only thing going on here. Allure refers to three things. Beauty, desire (shown by Rarity's obsession with wanting to cast the spell), and the aforementioned translation.

6) The book's passages are filled with real-life quotes on beauty, though some have been altered. Here is a list of some examples:
“Everything has beauty, but not everyone sees it.”
― Confucius
“Youth is happy because it has the capacity to see beauty. Anyone who keeps the ability to see beauty never grows old.”
― Franz Kafka
“Should you shield the canyons from the windstorms you would never see the true beauty of their carvings.”
― Elisabeth Kübler-Ross
“The power of finding beauty in the humblest things makes home happy and life lovely.”
― Louisa May Alcott
At any rate, I hope you enjoyed the story.

Cheers,
-Slorgy

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Comments ( 5 )

Just out of curiosity, where can I find the story?

2793940 it's currently in the approval queue, and should also show up on EQD in the next few days.

2794035 I'll keep an eye out for it, then.

It was quite the story. I know I probably would have cast it myself, or at the very least been sorely tempted.

Guess me and Rarity have a few things in common.

I'm wondering since this book was "A Lure" all along, were the beauty tips all part of Rarity's Honey as it were, if say Pinkie Pie had picked it up would it have had stuff about parties? or lost agricultural tips and magical remedies for bountiful harvests had it been AJ?

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