Apples at Sunset: Chapter 1 co-riff by Atlas Nebula and NaturalGlitch · 2:46am Dec 12th, 2012
Atlas: Yes, it seems that mediocre HiE clopfics can make it into the featured box. I tried to point this out but over 700 cloppers tried to kick my face in, so for now we’ll just mock it from a distance. Oh, and the author’s a virgin, and he said that he’s a virgin, and it definitely shows here. *sigh*
NaturalGlitch: Hi again, fair reader and riffers alike! I’m goin in on this blind, just like last time. From what I hear, this is a bland, cliche ridden HiE that got featured. FimFiction is slowly becoming the new TV Tropes (the forums, anyway) with bared idiocy and it’s unbridled joy of jumping into cesspools of mediocrity and stupidity. Well, enough about that, let’s dive in, shall we? Oh, and once again, Try reading these with Fallen’s Riffing drinking game.
Bet you didn't expect another riff so quickly, huh? Well, I never thought I could get another one done either. It helps to have someone else to work off of, and the fic itself is terri-bad, so it was easy to riff. Hope you guy's enjoy!
Read the full riff here! Comments are enabled, as always.
Glitchy! I can't access it! HALP!
601180 It should be fixed now. Sorry.
My major criticism is that you both ought to lay off the personal attacks and vindictive/angry comments a little bit. Unless it's something Mykan or Dusk Shine-level those comments really aren't funny and just lack in imagination. They can be taken as offensive, but my personal gripe is that they simply don't make me laugh. No matter your actual opinions, suck it up and go for the funny. Funny is all that matters.
602401 If this fanfic was just another dumb HiE clopfic then we probably would've made jokes just for the fun of it and nothing else. This not the case, because when something like this gets over 700 likes and 5000 views I get a little . . . pissed. Then again, a lot of my favorite comedians, especially George Carlin, are comedians of the angry variety, so it kind of rubbed off on me. I can't speak for Natural, but I guess this wasn't your kind of humor. Better luck next time?
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I'm still gonna read the riff, but...
I went to the story's page, where it looked like only one guy who wasn't the author replied to you, and politeness was had all around. Were comments deleted/PM's sent or something?
Also, this author doesn't seem like a bad guy to me. He recognizes that his writing isn't great and is trying to get better at it, and he's got a decent attitude to boot. Not his fault the story was featured.
Edit: Eh, couldn't finish. Story was more boring than your usual fare, and it sort of felt like you were grasping at straws.
602401 Tell that to Fallen Prime. That's his entire schtick. But, I get what you mean. I tried a combination of funny/angry/informative all at once. I guess I failed. Oh well, there's next chapter.
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You can say the same thing to Bronnystories, doesn't change the fact that his fics are terrible.
Tell me about it. There's only so much we could work with in this fic. But, from what I hear, this story get's dumber and worse, so I guess we can look forward to that?
And we might have been a little repetitive in our riff as well. We'll do better, we promise! I'm going to live up to the riffing name if it's the last thing I do!
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I more meant that insulting the guy personally sort of loses its brunt when he himself recognizes that his writing has problems and he's trying to fix them as he goes. It's not an excuse for bad writing, of course, but it kind of removes a lot of the humor from badmouthing him.
Looking forward to the next riff, though.
603652 Point taken. I hope we're funnier next time.
603695 Assuming we survive the next chapter.
It seems like we're going to have to spice things up next time.
But that's okay, because I have just the right idea for the job.