Hello all. If you don't know me, I'm the sap who created the story +1 Up and I need your help!

I need a test audience for it's sequel. I want to know if there are things I need to correct or fix. Anything I need to add or take out. Please, if you choose to help then keep one thing in mind. If the whole group likes it, then do not dislike it. If you find something wrong with the story or you don't like it, then please do not dislike the story. It's like a work in progress. So if you find any errors, do not dislike it for those errors. They will be fixed.

Here is the story. There is no password so don't worry. Like I said, let me know what you think and tell me anything that you think should be fixed.