Twilight discovers more about herself and Spike than she could have imagined, once their relationship is pushed to its boundaries and things change for better and worse.
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The Young and Free Dragon
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It's Fluttershy. Don't capitalize the s.
>Ha, thank you.
lolwut?
201939 Referring to the first person to post a comment if that's what your asking. As for capitalizing Shy, I've heard a lot about that, I'll edit it as soon as I get time. In the future of the story it'll be correct.
201949 I meant the thing with the gem, I thought that it was canon that he could just crunch them up using his jaw.
201971 Creative liberty.
201987
I approve of this usage of creative liberty. Furthermore, as the gem was uncommon enough for Spike to be unable to crack it and need Twilight to look for it in a book, it could very well be a rare, abnormally hard stone.
>She followed a trail of blunt and sharp objects, concluding that the young dragon was trying to break something. When she found him in the library, he was sitting on the floor, dazed. She saw the heart shaped gemstone and concluded that after trying several different things, he had tried his own forehead as the solution to the hard gem.
You didn't need to use the word "conclude" twice; were you trying to highlight Twilight's mindset?
>“Well Fluttershy was talking to me and she said you've been... hitting on her and that she'd like it if you'd st-...”
That was funny!
>“Got it!” He exclaimed, cutting her off as he broke a piece off and popped the gem into his mouth, chewing at it unsuccessfully for a moment before gritting his teeth and swallowing the hollow thing.
Putting song lyrics in a fic really makes it look like a diary entry from an angst-ridden teenager. Not a good first impression to make.
aside for some minor grammar errors ( wich i dont very much care about) ill say this story has alot of potentiale
i hope you will continue with this, because this can turn into a really good story
so without further adue....TRACKING!
202041
Well, it usually helps whenever you read the story, instead of judging it by what you see on the cover, but do whatever works for you.
Sorry guys, I just realized this was the totally unedited version. I'm really sorry, and thanks for pointing out the errors. I'll get it all corrected, and the next chapter will be up tomorrow.
Oh dear somepony sent Spike a love poison. I wonder who it was. Tracked.
You need to actually SHOW Spike's interaction with Twilight, not just skip over them and vaguely mention them.
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Well the story isn't done yet, actually only in the first chapter. I can't see how I could possibly fit any of that in later on. I suppose it's doomed.
I have to agree with Alan.
I like the pace of this story keep it up.
This is getting interesting.
I wonder where this is all headed.
Ugg Pinkie STILL doesn't understand situations, but in all seriousness good job
Pinkie... sooo clueless
251349
Quite, but you gotta love her.
nice chapter.
the years for the poines are about 16 17 and 18. twilight was like five or six when she hatched spike. so spike would be about 13 assume dragons age the same just live longer. so it is like the mane six are high school senoir and spike is a freshman
I agree with Spikethed, that sounds reasonable. Anyway, your doing an amazing job on this, keep it up. love how Spike's eyes get whenever the spell comes in contact with him, hoping Twi accepts his love for her (or would it be lust?)
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251354 I'm honestly hoping to see more of this, this is my thrid time reading these chapters and I really wish to see more.....I LOVE Pinkie pie, she's so freaking random you just can't help but laugh your ass off....
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Thats if dragon years are counted the same as pony years. I'm still willing to believe spike may be a bit older than what pony think he is.
Theres kinda a problem with Twilight encouraging Spike to only hookup with a dragoness. Spike only knows ponies,he was hatched by Twilight,he's been raised around ponies his entire life. From what I've been told about dragons in MLP:FiM, dragons are more loners then social like ponies. If they're more loners then I doubt there would be very much of a relationship Spike would be seeking.
I see were this is going, and I like it.
The last phase by Spike could have been better like, "Whoa Twilight......you so are cute"
251354
What is this Valentines Day ?
And why is Spike acting weird ? Was he drugged or something ?
And will the fic continue ?
Go, go, go with that fanfic.
So sad that this is dead and the author seems to be too...
This is a terrific story. It's too bad we probably won't be seeing an end for it.
I wonder who sent the gemstone in the first place?
I suppose the most obvious culprit would be Celestia (unless this was written post Cadance), because of how close her letter to Twilight was from when the Gemstone arrived.