The streets of canterlot can be very scary at night for a pegasus who isn't from there. Luckily there was a stallion pegasus named Soarin who was there to help her find her way. She didn't excpect to fall in love with him and nither did he. This is my first fic and i'm dyslxic so sorry about spelling :/
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Thanks for the crtisimum!
and again thanks
and i'll try to make the chapters longer but i'll have to re-read my work and stuff and i'll define my o.c and stuff like that
The chapters are all about 500 words so far its better than before and theres a new chapter! yaaaaay!!!!!!!!!
I think im doing better.
I fineshed
yaaaay i'll wright another one soon
*looks at title* I see what you did there
I liked the story.. but it seemed kinda rushed for my taste. it has potential, but i didn't feel any emotion coming from crystal snow and soarin'. for example, on there wedding, they said there vows (which were well written.) and the ending kiss, i suppose i just didn't feel the romantic spark that they shared in the story. but these are slightly minor. and doesn't effect the story that much, as it was still a potentially good story. I can tell you really tried in this one. good luck for future stories!
"But when I think of her I can't focuse."
Change 'focuse' to focus
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fatelfatal from jumping off a cloud that high.A few spelling errors and grammatical errors, but very nice... If only you could put in more details. Hope you can do that for your next book...